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Oct 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "different aspects of my life" - FSU Essay: Paragraph 1 about Vires, Artes and Mores [4]

Just a little intro that I want people's opinion on. If there are are any grammar errors or things that you think would make it better, let me know.

When I see the words "Vires, Artes, and Mores," I envision all the different aspects of my life that relate to them. And while each word provokes its own individual set of responses, Mores, to me, holds the most significance amongst them. The Latin word "Mores," a term pertaining to customs and character, remains one that represents all that I cannot live without.
CillaC   
Oct 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "different aspects of my life" - FSU Essay: Paragraph 1 about Vires, Artes and Mores [4]

You do understand that it's only an intro, right? I already have an experience to demonstrate it, however, that would appear in the body paragraph that follows.

The second sentence would basically serve to separate each term, and the third to define it, as the next paragraph doesn't even mention the word. And starting with a narrative would defeat the purpose of the next paragraph as well.
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