Writing Feedback / Nobody can deny the important role of newspapers in providing information to the reader [5]

It was just my personal preference, but I think "Personally I agree with this view." was not applicable in essay writing, especially "Personally". You can change this into "This essay supports this view" or "In my point of view, this view is agreeable. My essay will augment/further discuss it."

"The popular" issue should be replaced with "The common" issue. It's about word choice, I guess. Hope this helps you consider a little bit more ^^

Scholarship / if the aim of science is not to open the door to infinite wisdom ? - Career Plan Essay Chevening [7]

"......infinite error ?. " Please do not put a period after a question mark.

In a private company.

as the front line

that field related to internal control

There were a lot of grammar mistakes, mostly misuse or lack of article (a/an/the), you should revise it many times. Besides, some frequent adjectives lack of hyphenates too, such as small medium enterprise when it should be small-medium or middle term plan where it should be middle-term.

Hope this helps.