anuj1450
Nov 1, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Project WORTHY'. I need to cut some of this UIUC essay down, can you help? [9]
Hi everybody, it's last minute so if you can help me please don't hesitate!! I need some help cutting down the essay so I can include some sort of conclusion; I feel like I'm missing part of the prompt. If you have any suggestions, or comments, please feel free to let me know. By the way, I wont have the spaces between paragraphs, this is just so I can have some formatting on the forum post.
Prompt: In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it.
EDITED
As a freshman in high school, my Introduction to Engineering Design teacher presented me with an application for Project WORTHY, a program for high school students interested in pursuing engineering or business. I chose to apply for the program because of my interest in engineering and my curiosity about the corporate world.
I expected a lot from the program, but I underestimated how much and how fast I would learn. My interview was at Northrop Grumman, and for the first time outside of school, I was able to showcase my talents and ambitions. For the next three months, as I waited for my acceptance letter, I could only think about Project WORTHY.
As part of the program, I have been able to work on my own engineering projects. The first year, I chose to explore radio frequency jamming and controlling. I learned how to use equipment such as signal generators, oscilloscopes, and spectrum analyzers to read a radio wave, and then generate a wave that can cripple a robot. I then moved on to programming that same robot during my junior year. This year, I wanted to incorporate what I had learned in my engineering classes at school, with the resources at Northrop Grumman. I am designing, programming, building, and marketing a fuel economy gauge for automobiles.
The summer enrichment portion of the program was particularly beneficial. Each summer, students in the program collaborate on an engineering project. During my first summer, I was elected CEO of the mock company. My company built a robot and presented it to executives at Northrop Grumman. This past summer, I was the student lead for the program. It was an amazing opportunity to be in a management position, even with the longer hours, because that is where I see myself in the future.
Thank you in advance for all of your help!
Hi everybody, it's last minute so if you can help me please don't hesitate!! I need some help cutting down the essay so I can include some sort of conclusion; I feel like I'm missing part of the prompt. If you have any suggestions, or comments, please feel free to let me know. By the way, I wont have the spaces between paragraphs, this is just so I can have some formatting on the forum post.
Prompt: In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it.
EDITED
As a freshman in high school, my Introduction to Engineering Design teacher presented me with an application for Project WORTHY, a program for high school students interested in pursuing engineering or business. I chose to apply for the program because of my interest in engineering and my curiosity about the corporate world.
I expected a lot from the program, but I underestimated how much and how fast I would learn. My interview was at Northrop Grumman, and for the first time outside of school, I was able to showcase my talents and ambitions. For the next three months, as I waited for my acceptance letter, I could only think about Project WORTHY.
As part of the program, I have been able to work on my own engineering projects. The first year, I chose to explore radio frequency jamming and controlling. I learned how to use equipment such as signal generators, oscilloscopes, and spectrum analyzers to read a radio wave, and then generate a wave that can cripple a robot. I then moved on to programming that same robot during my junior year. This year, I wanted to incorporate what I had learned in my engineering classes at school, with the resources at Northrop Grumman. I am designing, programming, building, and marketing a fuel economy gauge for automobiles.
The summer enrichment portion of the program was particularly beneficial. Each summer, students in the program collaborate on an engineering project. During my first summer, I was elected CEO of the mock company. My company built a robot and presented it to executives at Northrop Grumman. This past summer, I was the student lead for the program. It was an amazing opportunity to be in a management position, even with the longer hours, because that is where I see myself in the future.
Thank you in advance for all of your help!