kimchung3679
Mar 22, 2023
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1: The graph illustrates how the population has changed from 2003 to 2050 [2]
Hi. I am self-studying for the IELTS exam, I'm trying to get a band 7.0 in writing skills and here is one of my tasks 1 writing, I would be so grateful if I could get feedback on my mistakes and how to improve my writing. Thank you!
The graph illustrates how the population has changed from 2003 to 2050 in four countries namely: Argentina, Indonesia, Italy, and the Republic of Korea.
As can be seen from the graph, Indonesia has the highest proportion in the period, while Argentina has the lowest proportion.
In the year 2003, Indonesia has the highest population, at 238 million. In the next 23 years, Indonesia's proportion reached 274 million people. The period from 2025 to 2050 has an impressive percentage reached at peak of the graph, at 312 million approximately twice more than in 2003.
Meanwhile, in the year 2003, three other countries were three times lower than Indonesia in the same period. Argentina and Italy have a near population in the year 2025. Furthermore, the Republic of Korea has a higher percentage, at 52 million people. In 2050, Argentina is the highest proportion of three countries, at 62, million people.
the populatiON Rate of Argentina, Indonesia, Italy, and the Republic of Korea
Hi. I am self-studying for the IELTS exam, I'm trying to get a band 7.0 in writing skills and here is one of my tasks 1 writing, I would be so grateful if I could get feedback on my mistakes and how to improve my writing. Thank you!
The graph illustrates how the population has changed from 2003 to 2050 in four countries namely: Argentina, Indonesia, Italy, and the Republic of Korea.
As can be seen from the graph, Indonesia has the highest proportion in the period, while Argentina has the lowest proportion.
In the year 2003, Indonesia has the highest population, at 238 million. In the next 23 years, Indonesia's proportion reached 274 million people. The period from 2025 to 2050 has an impressive percentage reached at peak of the graph, at 312 million approximately twice more than in 2003.
Meanwhile, in the year 2003, three other countries were three times lower than Indonesia in the same period. Argentina and Italy have a near population in the year 2025. Furthermore, the Republic of Korea has a higher percentage, at 52 million people. In 2050, Argentina is the highest proportion of three countries, at 62, million people.