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Dec 2, 2023
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITRING TASK 1: The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European [2]
The bar chart illustrates the expenditure of people in Britain, France, Italy and Germany on six different products.
Overall, British people allocated significantly more money on six items than the three other European countries mentioned on the chart. While photographic film is the most popular commodity among the six products.
People in Britain consumed the highest number of photographic film, toys, and CDs, with spending at nearly £175,000, £170,000, and £160,000 respectively. Followed by French and Italians with an average spending amount of approximately £150,000, whilst Germans paid out less than £150,000 for each product.
Regarding the less three popular goods (perfumes, tennis racquets, personal stereos), Italy and Britain have the higher overall expenditure on these items, at roughly £150,000 in comparison to the figures for spending by French and Germans. With around £145,000 spent on tennis racquets, it is the lowest figure shown on the chart.
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The bar chart illustrates the expenditure of people in Britain, France, Italy and Germany on six different products.
Overall, British people allocated significantly more money on six items than the three other European countries mentioned on the chart. While photographic film is the most popular commodity among the six products.
People in Britain consumed the highest number of photographic film, toys, and CDs, with spending at nearly £175,000, £170,000, and £160,000 respectively. Followed by French and Italians with an average spending amount of approximately £150,000, whilst Germans paid out less than £150,000 for each product.
Regarding the less three popular goods (perfumes, tennis racquets, personal stereos), Italy and Britain have the higher overall expenditure on these items, at roughly £150,000 in comparison to the figures for spending by French and Germans. With around £145,000 spent on tennis racquets, it is the lowest figure shown on the chart.
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Please help to read and evaluate my essay, I'm starting learning writing skills and really appreciate your feedback
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The Bar Chart