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melaaanieee   
Nov 18, 2009
Undergraduate / Short Activity Essay for Common App - Volunteering in Ecuador [5]

Over the summer of 2008, I had the privilege to travel to Ecuador with a group of American students and volunteer at Nińos de la Calle, a center that houses homeless children. Our work took place in their small park where we picked up garbage, swept pathways, and built a 20 foot fence surrounding the area. Although the days were long and work was strenuous, it was all worth it in the end. Conversing with the children in broken English made me realize how happy they were to be out of the streets and I understood how important and necessary service work is, not only in my community, but also in foreign lands. I ventured out into South America expecting adventure and fun, but found out that helping others was more fun and fulfilling than I could have asked for.

I am unsure about the wording of the last 2 sentences, but I would really like to keep the same kind of structure. Thank you for helping! Any feedback is appreciated! : )
melaaanieee   
Nov 18, 2009
Undergraduate / Short Activity Essay for Common App - Volunteering in Ecuador [5]

Ateitelb: I didn't notice I used fun twice.. oops! and thank you for your feedback.

Arwen: The prompt is to write about an activity which had a significant effect on your life and why. My advisor said to avoid repeating the prompt and delve right into the story. Thanks :)
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