Undergraduate / My education in Taiwan - Study plan for scholarship in division of global commerce [2]

Please judge and criticize my essay, i have got no instruction at all on how to write this essay. this essay will play an important role in my scholarship application, please help me and dont mind to judge if there is something off. Notes: some paragraph position may not be aligned well in here

Detailed Study Plan

Preparation before studying in Tamkang University

Following my high school graduation, Although my father is the main sponsor for my study, I intentionally took a one-year gap to save up and collect funds to be financially prepared, before I shift to study abroad for my bachelor degree. Instead of viewing my gap year as a break from my studies, I see this year off as an opportunity not only to gain work experiences but also growth in my academics. I have secured a full time role in the retail sector, where I am not only able to save up money and make connections but also practice my bilingual language skills. Simply because my workplace is located in PIK, which is a strategic hub where a substantial number of foreign companies are located. Therefore, the majority of my customers are foreigners who come to Indonesia for work and most of them use Mandarin or English as a medium to communicate. As a result, this job not only builds up my savings but also improves my bilingual language skills.

Beside my professional job, I study Mandarin and Global Commerce related knowledge as well, such as the principle of micro & macro economics, accounting, statistics, etc. I dedicated myself to finding balance in work-study life, and committed myself to a self-study routine throughout my free time after work or in my holidays. Additionally, I study Mandarin regularly as well to enhance my communication skills step by step and adapt quickly when I arrive in Taiwan next year and I also study Global Commerce fundamentals to be one step ahead at the time when I start my study in Taiwan. I use lecture videos from MIT Open Courseware and specific YouTube videos for my source of materials.

In conclusion, I have planned a year for professional and academic development to be financially prepared, gain work experiences and to build both academic and language foundation to be used as my advantages during the beginning of my education in Taiwan.

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Undergraduate / Autobiography for Taiwan university application [2]

ps:I have never write an autobiography before, i do not know if this correct and suit for university application please give some feedbacks, thank you

My name is X, born in Indonesia, Jakarta to be precise, as the first child of three siblings. Growing up with both parents in the garment industry, their dedication in their occupation taught me that behind every product there is hard work and problem-solving skills, as they need to reach tight deadlines and negotiation skills to secure orders. Additionally, my younger brother also has a big and deep influence in my life, being on the down-syndrome spectrum. He made me realize the true understanding does not come from how we see things through our eyes but through others. Although his way of communicating is not by spoken language, but through his appearance and actions. He faces the world without a mask, when he is frustrated or excited, he expresses his feelings and is willing to let everyone know. He taught me how to be unapologetically myself without minding how others see me.
Since I was a kid, I have always been someone who dares to try new things. My curiosity turned me into an active person. I always balance between studies and my hobbies, in my free time, you will often find me at the gym, on a run or on the court playing basketball and you would also find me watching courses or reading a book. Other than study and sports, I also love keeping up with local fashion trends and updates, which is a fun way for me to explore creativity and trends among teens and adults.
During high school, I was an ambitious and enthusiastic student, who stood out because of my experiences in leadership, community service and good academics. As one of the contributors to two championships in basketball tournaments, I have learned about team-work and the importance of dedication & efforts throughout the process. My enthusiasm drives me to active participation in school events. Where I have taken chances in managing and performing in school events, such as Easter, Christmas and Chinese new year celebration. Furthermore, I have shown a commitment in serving humanity by volunteering with the Leo club, developing a strong sense of social responsibility.
My high school studies and work experiences in retail stores has sparked my interest in global business and economics. I usually work in my father's clothing store during holidays and academic breaks. While helping there, I indirectly studied the cost of goods and how they were supplied in the most effective way. Because of that curiosity, I realized I want to study more about global business and economics. I want to understand how global trade really works, why prices differ across countries, and how supply chain is applied in the system.
Following my high school graduation, I intentionally took a one-year gap to focus on personal and professional development before I shifted to study abroad for my bachelor degree. Instead of viewing my gap year as a break from my studies, I see this year off as an opportunity not only to gain work experiences but also growth in my academics. I have secured a full time role in the retail sector, where I am not only able to make connections but also practice my bilingual language skills. Simply because my workplace is located in PIK, which is a strategic hub where a substantial number of foreign companies are located. Therefore, the majority of my customers are foreigners who come to Indonesia for work and most of them use Mandarin or English to communicate.
Competing with other job applicants makes me realize the demand and supply of Indonesia's job market are not balanced, as the availability of job employment opportunities did not match with the demand. This job crisis encourages me to help the expansion of International firms in Indonesia. Consequently, not only develops the Indonesian market growth but also creates job opportunities for Indonesians, which Indonesia is lacking in.