Undergraduate / Prompt # 1, Their Struggles [5]

is there anything wrong with my essay?

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

America is a land of freedom and opportunity. My parents had come here for an opportunity for a better life. Before I was born, my family lived in China. My grandparents from both parents' sides fled to Vietnam as Communism took over. My parents were both born in Vietnam and their families struggled to make a living. When my parents were young they had to drop out of school to work and help out their families. As they reached the age I am today, Communism began to take over Vietnam. Both my parents fled to refugee camps: my dad to Malaysia and my mom to the Philippines. They soon left to go to America...