Undergraduate / "My father" - essay topic #3-an important person and the impact on you [4]

Hi!

You made a mistake ...

To my great surprise, my father intended to take me to Beijing during my holiday. It was marvelous for me! Never had I ever been to anywhere 100 miles away from my small town, not to say the capital city 1000 miles away..

did you mean 100 miles??

Really like the essay!! It isn't cliche.And it has very goo descriptions!! Well Written.

I personally think it is readable, and you could cut down on just a little--very minuscule-- if you are worried about the word limit.