Undergraduate / The way I see myself: Stanford essay. To my roommate! [8]

well this one is dicey, i was working on mine a few hours back. the problem with your essay as i see it is it tries to do too much. you only have 1800 characters to work with, so home in on any one or two of the aspects of this essay, like ur sunny side, or ur love for astronomy, and then develop that. i guess it'll help out but i donno, after all if you feel this is right then keep it.