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Posts by ThinLizzie
Joined: Jan 10, 2010
Last Post: Jan 15, 2010
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ThinLizzie   
Jan 10, 2010
Scholarship / To work for WHO or UNICEF - 250-400 words on my vision for the future [6]

January 10, 2010
Any thoughts, error correction, etc. is appreciated. I am glad I found this site! I am a helper, and I love the concept here! Thanks in advance, lizzie.

"If I had a hammer, I'd hammer in the morning. I'd hammer in the evening all over this land..." (Peter, Paul, and Mary, c 1963).

I have a vision that changes the way we love each other. In my vision, I lend myself to helping a stranger; my heart is my instrument and my hands are my work-station. It is innate, I think, this need to help; I didn't learn it somewhere, I inhaled it with my first breath. So I will help in some bigger way.

My goals are founded within this innate need, and my dreams of academic success are only a means to achieve my goals. I hope to inspire people along the way. People like my sister, who considers herself the most overwhelmed person on the planet even though she never leaves the safety of her couch: my niece, Amber, whom I used to call my "Minnie Me." She will watch and learn the effort it takes to realize a dream; telling is not enough

My vision has taken me around the country and around the globe, but there are places and people who need me still. My ability to persevere feeds my soul, and I will feed the souls of others because I know some stuff; I know what it means to live in the woods, and I understand the decorum of a black-tie affair. I will get to those who need me, and I will heal them.

My long-term goal takes me to impoverished nations in a healing capacity. I don't mind living in the dirt with no amenities. I have medical knowledge, and I will glean even more through formal education. My dream is to work for the World Health Organization or UNICEF treating illnesses in devastated locals, and I hope to acquire contacts, friends, and experience in charitable funding, so that I may bring my knowledge home one day, and help the working poor of our society. I hope to one day make others strong so they can love their global brothers and their sisters. Education will be my hammer.
ThinLizzie   
Jan 11, 2010
Scholarship / To work for WHO or UNICEF - 250-400 words on my vision for the future [6]

Hi, Linmark, I don't know why this ended up in scholarship essays. Maybe I hit the wrong button. It is actually an entrance exam essay (if they let me choose the topic...), but I thought I put it under general essay help (?). I have changed those couple of things you mentioned. Is it clearer?...BTW the "hammer" is a metaphor for the tool I will use to change the world :) as soon as I finish school and get a job haha! It is from the song I quoted in the beginning. Let me know if it is still too ambiguous. Thank you for your help.
ThinLizzie   
Jan 15, 2010
Scholarship / To work for WHO or UNICEF - 250-400 words on my vision for the future [6]

I understood your hammer metaphor - just questioned why education. Your deliberate use here then means (to me) that you intend to use education to help the "devastated locals."

yep. Just right!

Also, regarding your continued confusion about the word "overwhelmed," I looked it up again to be sure I understood the literal definition...and yep, that is exactly what I meant when I said it.

Thanks, A, I really appreciate the dialog. I think it is a-ok now! Should I have said "locales??" I might have spelled that wrong, but I can't find out for sure.
ThinLizzie   
Jan 15, 2010
Essays / Accents and dialects (the difficulties of understanding different dialects) [6]

I'm sorry, I took too long and they kicked me out! lol!

effingpot.com/slang.shtml ...food for thought
grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/writing-with-accents.aspx ...food for thought
email.eva.mpg.de/~wichmann/Wichmann&Davletshin2.pdf ...This is a credible source
utexas.edu/courses/jbaldrid/2006/computational-syntax/papers/ccg-is_spi.pdf ...another credible source

I am not sure what you're going for, but the bits up there might at least point you in the right direction. I believe it's all how some people frame their word order or sentence structure. It is also evident in common syntax and composition of words and thoughts. I have a hard time with other languages, for instance, because the word roots may be the same, but the usage is different. Do you like my but I was talking about your asses are great animals. You get the drift here?

Good luck! I hope you at least got some ideas (nothing fresh was meant by that!) lol!
Lizzie

You may have to copy and paste the links like I did...no tellin'

Why are you only asking guys to help you? Seems you're narrowing the field a bit, but what ever.
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