wsh725
Mar 11, 2010
Undergraduate / 'Fifty-two' - Standford - Intellectually Engaging experience [5]
Hi, I'm currently working on my personal statement.
the prompt is
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.
I'm seeking for help more on the opinion about if this essay meets the prompt rather than the grammar part because i'm not sure if i'm on the right path. (i'm going to fix the grammars later)
Thank you so much for reading it!
Fifty-two. That's how many guppy fries I have now and also it's the number of choices I have for making a new guppy breed. My family bought guppies from the pet store a few months ago with the wish that our family business will flourish like fish giving birth to lots of offspring. I wasn't really interested in fish at first because I thought that fish were boring. I couldn't understand why people have fish instead of dogs or cats, as a pet because I cannot pet them, walk with them, or play with them. But my question didn't last long because I figured out the unique characteristic of guppies; I can make my own breed of guppy.
One of my male guppies has a scissor like tail. When I went to the pet store with my dad, I was eager to have him because I wanted to see his offspring. After a month of pregnancy, one of my female guppies gave birth to seventeen fries. That day, I wasn't able to go to sleep because I spent the whole night watching the fries. It takes guppy fries about a month to show their color. A few days ago, my male fries started to show the color on their tails that is inherited from my scissor like tailed male. In a few weeks, my fries will show clear coloration and I am planning to choose several pairs of F1 guppies that have good coloration and health so then I can breed them to make my own guppy breeds. I want to have more generations of guppies so then I can make a new breed that I can use to study how their color gets passed on.
Now, I don't think that fish are boring at all as a pet. Guppies are more than a pet to me because they opened a new door for me: I can do experiments and studies on guppies. If there's anyone who thinks fish are boring, I'm sure that listening to an idea of how unique this pet is will change their view on fish as a pet.
It's 1793 characters (max 1800 characteres)
I've taken biology classes, but I don't fully know about genetics yet. I think my interest on guppies is just the beginning of my field of the study, biology.
Hi, I'm currently working on my personal statement.
the prompt is
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.
I'm seeking for help more on the opinion about if this essay meets the prompt rather than the grammar part because i'm not sure if i'm on the right path. (i'm going to fix the grammars later)
Thank you so much for reading it!
Fifty-two. That's how many guppy fries I have now and also it's the number of choices I have for making a new guppy breed. My family bought guppies from the pet store a few months ago with the wish that our family business will flourish like fish giving birth to lots of offspring. I wasn't really interested in fish at first because I thought that fish were boring. I couldn't understand why people have fish instead of dogs or cats, as a pet because I cannot pet them, walk with them, or play with them. But my question didn't last long because I figured out the unique characteristic of guppies; I can make my own breed of guppy.
One of my male guppies has a scissor like tail. When I went to the pet store with my dad, I was eager to have him because I wanted to see his offspring. After a month of pregnancy, one of my female guppies gave birth to seventeen fries. That day, I wasn't able to go to sleep because I spent the whole night watching the fries. It takes guppy fries about a month to show their color. A few days ago, my male fries started to show the color on their tails that is inherited from my scissor like tailed male. In a few weeks, my fries will show clear coloration and I am planning to choose several pairs of F1 guppies that have good coloration and health so then I can breed them to make my own guppy breeds. I want to have more generations of guppies so then I can make a new breed that I can use to study how their color gets passed on.
Now, I don't think that fish are boring at all as a pet. Guppies are more than a pet to me because they opened a new door for me: I can do experiments and studies on guppies. If there's anyone who thinks fish are boring, I'm sure that listening to an idea of how unique this pet is will change their view on fish as a pet.
It's 1793 characters (max 1800 characteres)
I've taken biology classes, but I don't fully know about genetics yet. I think my interest on guppies is just the beginning of my field of the study, biology.