Essays / Thesis Statement for A Separate Peace Chapter 1-3 [3]

This is my thesis statement for Chapter 1-3:
The Super Suicide Society possesses a rite of passage for all young men at the Devon School by challenging their instincts and pushing them furthermore in preparation of wartime.

Could you please give me your feedback? And tell me if it makes sense? I am having a difficulty writing strong and moving thesis statements. thank you.

Alisha