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sparkglowgirl   
Mar 22, 2010
Undergraduate / NUS Discretionary Admission Essay -Japanese Language [7]

Prompt: This section is an opportunity for you to elaborate on the information you have provided earlier. You may discuss a special talent, a personal experience or an activity that you have been involved in that is relevant to the course you are applying for admission.

The deadline is looming so I need urgent help. Have to keep within 2000 characters. I would appreciate any editing or criticism. Thank you!!

I have always had a keen interest in the Japanese culture. When presented with the opportunity to learn the language in secondary school, I leapt at the chance. I love languages and it was a wonderful way to better understand and appreciate the nuances of the language, which would enable me to gain a comprehensive insight into their culture and lifestyle.

While learning the language, I took part in various exchange programs. In 2008, I participated in the Waseda-SILS Fall Program in Japan. I was thoroughly immersed in the Japanese lifestyle as I interacted with native students, attended lectures and even went shopping with them. Beyond the fleeting fascination with Japanese pop culture, I was particularly impressed by the impeccable service and graciousness of the Japanese people. It piqued my interest and motivated me to find out more about what made a gracious civil society and the impact of society on the individual and vice versa.

I also participated in a local immersion program at the Waseda Shibuya High School. This experience gave me a refreshing perspective on the Japanese culture as it was a cultural exchange in a local setting. I learnt how the Japanese students were adapting to life in Singapore; how certain practices that have faded into familiarity were in fact new and interesting to them. I realized how similar we could be in our values and traditions despite our differences. With a rich amalgamation of cultures in Singapore, building bridges of understanding and communication across the cultures is essential to discover our differences and commonalities.

Therefore, I believe the Japanese Studies and Sociology courses offered at FASS in NUS are exciting and comprehensive. With its unique emphasis on breadth and depth of learning, a holistic liberal arts education at NUS would not only deepen my interest in this area but also provide me with an incomparable edge in my future career.
sparkglowgirl   
Mar 22, 2010
Undergraduate / NUS Discretionary Admission Essay -Japanese Language [7]

Hi. I need to submit my application form with the essay soon so I need help rather urgently! I want to see if my style of writing and the direction of my essay is going the right way so that I can make any changes to it. In fact, I came up with another version of the essay. Please tell me which is better, the previous one or this other version. I appreciate any comments, advice or criticism, any at all. Thank you so much!

A slightly different version. Which is better?
sparkglowgirl   
Mar 24, 2010
Undergraduate / NUS Discretionary Admission Essay -Japanese Language [7]

Hi Kevin! Thank you for taking time to reply! I sort of came up with a 'combined' version. Not sure if I made it worse...really worried that I did :( I'm feeling so stressed out now. :'( Really hope I can submit it soon. Please help me take a look at it as soon as you can. Thank you so much!!
sparkglowgirl   
Mar 24, 2010
Undergraduate / NUS Discretionary Admission Essay -Japanese Language [7]

Thank you so much for all your encouragement and advice, fall2010transfe and Kevin! Really appreciate it a lot :) And yes, I'll keep working on my writing skills! :) Just submitted my applications...feeling relieved now! Thank you again! God Bless.
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