Writing Feedback / Childhood Experience-Writing Practice ("my parents are still my best friends") [4]

Please correct my essay.Thanks

Prompt: Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience and explain its effect on your life.

Strong impressions and memories in childhood tend to affect a person's life. Fortunately, I have a great memory in my childhood that is giving positive influence to my life. I remember that I used to go to picnic every Saturday with my family. My parents like to go to small town village out side of city to the nature.

When I was really young around five years old, we went to the park and mountain near by my house. My mother waked my brother and me up early in the morning to be prepared. We all wore same color of shirts and jeans although I felt it was embarrassed. I learned how to ride a bicycle from my father. He also taught me fishing, hiking and even riding a horse. Through the diverse experiences within the nature, I could feel comfortable and appreciated to the nature.

In addition, when I was in teenager, my parents more likely to have family trip to different state instead of forcing me to study a home. While my father was driving, we had a great conversation in a car. Through the time, we could more understand each other. He brought our family to various places so I could wide my perspective of views towards the life.

Although I was not aware of the precious moment at the time, now I can tell how it was important in my life. Through the time we were being together, I learned how family works together and help each other. Also, that is the reason why my parents are still my best friend who I can talk everything.

Writing Feedback / CBEST Writing: My favorite subject/course in school (Korean Literature) [2]

I am currently struggling with CBEST Writing because I'm an international student and have so many issues in writing process especially grammar. Please help me out!!!!

Prompt: Think of one course taken in highschool that has had particular significance to you.

When I was in High school, my favorite subject was the Korean Literature. Most friends of mine used to fall asleep in the class because they felt the subject was boring and old-fashioned. However, my eyes were widened and I felt excited as the Literature class has started. I thought the subject was leading me to the new world that I had never experienced before in my life.

Through the reading of variety genre of the Literature, I could feel my ancestor's life and culture in the specific era. Especially in old poem, I noticed their values such as loyalty to the nation, religious attitudes influenced by shamanism, Buddhism and Confucianism. Moreover, people started to write an essay which is more narrative and descriptive based on their usual life. Through the reading, I could feel their sorrow, happiness and depicted love of nature and man. For me, it was fascinated to find out someone's feeling through out the short piece of the Literature.

As well as reading and analyzing others' masterpieces, my teacher, Mrs. Lee asked us to create some of the writing based on the characters of the Literature that we learned in the class. Sometime, I pretended to be a soldier who was filled with loyalty towards the Kingdom and described my emotions in the short poem. In addition, she made us to write a love letter to the main characters in the Literature. At the first time, students including me complained to the teacher because we were not familiar with the work. However, through the writing processing, I learned and practiced how to imagine other people's status and emotions.

Reading and writing process in the Korean Literature subject was one of my communication way to the world and history. I could access to various styles of Literature in different ages from old times to the modern ages. It always refreshed my thoughts and feelings during the school years.