Undergraduate / admissions essay--WHY DO YOU WANT TO ATTEND NYUAD? [10]

Hey Silkesha!!
Are you applying to NYU AD this coming school year?
I am happily, anxiously, and excitedly part of the inaugural class of '14 for NYU AD!
When I applied last year, I actually didn't apply directly to NYU AD so I won't have too much specific help to provide, but I can give you a feel tips!

Try to be more specific! Honestly, it's written well but it's not extremely distinctive. In my opinion, your best part was the "meandering brooks" which was a nice metaphor of sorts that brought imagery. I would expand upon that and throw in additional extended metaphors. Also, perhaps reflect on an important personal moment in your life that you find demonstrates your global outlook and that you're the right fit for NYU AD. Good luck!!

Undergraduate / admissions essay--WHY DO YOU WANT TO ATTEND NYUAD? [10]

No problem!!

If you're wondering why I've seemed to drop off the planet that is Facebook and haven't accepted your request yet... I'm in China at the moment and consequently behind "THE GREAT FIREWALL OF CHINA" which blocks among many other things, Facebook. So yeah, I'm not purposefully ignoring you.

Well good luck with the college process! I won't bother fudging the truth... Senior year 1st semester will be a pain in the arse.

To be brutally honest, the acceptance rate for my class was 2.1%. Though it may seem exceedingly daunting, I wish to remind you that hope and action get one much further than despair and wallowing in self-pity and doubt.

If you have the time and wish to do some soul searching in order to ascertain whether NYU AD might be a good fit for you, then check out the book Cosmopolitan by Appiah. It's also my class' summer reading assignment of sorts... Hopefully it'll give you much to think about and perhaps tickle your muse and inspire your writing!