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Jul 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / telephone has greater effects on human kind than television has. [4]
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?telephone has greater effects on human kind than television has.
Telephones and televisions are the most significant inventions in the long history of human lives. It's no doubt about the tremendous importance of them. However, some people want to discuss whether telephones influence human kind more than television does. My mother, maintaining this viewpoint that telephones definitely bring more impacts to the world, claims that telephones shorten the distance between her and me. I concede her opinion. Nevertheless, as for me, television, as a mass media, has greater effects on us than telephone has from the aspects of the enrichment of experiences and the development of human values.
Initially, one issue which encourages me to hold this opinion is that televisions enrich the colors of our life. In ancient times, human may have only a few activities. They hunted in the daytime and slept in the nighttime. The survival mainly was their mere mission. However, in contemporary century, innumerable emotions, activities and events form our colorful life. The people in China, where is about half of the earth's perimeter away from America, is able to be informed immediately what the Americans happened just now. The appearance of television accelerates human modernization. I still remember that what a huge shook I had when I saw the high-resolution pictures of Mars. Television make it easier for us to know how the world changes. We generously share our findings, knowledge, news, entertainments and so forth.
To back up my point, it could be relevant to include another cause that television plays a vital role in the formation of human values. For example, documentaries and has spawned great effects in our recognition of natural science and human science, helping us improve our understanding of the material world, and form the reasonable perspective towards human activities. Similarly, television teaches our children about the justice, by broadcasting a biography of a prominent celebrity and appreciating the responsibility of polices. Perhaps most importantly, television as a perfect teacher, lead us to perceive the subtle relationship of the world, which completely influence the whole life.
On the other hand, it is essential not to take this assertion too far. As my mother said, telephone also has effect a change of our lives. However, I believe the influence of telephone is relatively low. As a substitute for a letter and telegram, telephones enhance the communication efficiency. Compared to the influence of television, telephone may seem a little neglected.
please help me correct some mistakes. i may use some sentences in this Saturday for my test.
Thank you!!
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?telephone has greater effects on human kind than television has.
Telephones and televisions are the most significant inventions in the long history of human lives. It's no doubt about the tremendous importance of them. However, some people want to discuss whether telephones influence human kind more than television does. My mother, maintaining this viewpoint that telephones definitely bring more impacts to the world, claims that telephones shorten the distance between her and me. I concede her opinion. Nevertheless, as for me, television, as a mass media, has greater effects on us than telephone has from the aspects of the enrichment of experiences and the development of human values.
Initially, one issue which encourages me to hold this opinion is that televisions enrich the colors of our life. In ancient times, human may have only a few activities. They hunted in the daytime and slept in the nighttime. The survival mainly was their mere mission. However, in contemporary century, innumerable emotions, activities and events form our colorful life. The people in China, where is about half of the earth's perimeter away from America, is able to be informed immediately what the Americans happened just now. The appearance of television accelerates human modernization. I still remember that what a huge shook I had when I saw the high-resolution pictures of Mars. Television make it easier for us to know how the world changes. We generously share our findings, knowledge, news, entertainments and so forth.
To back up my point, it could be relevant to include another cause that television plays a vital role in the formation of human values. For example, documentaries and has spawned great effects in our recognition of natural science and human science, helping us improve our understanding of the material world, and form the reasonable perspective towards human activities. Similarly, television teaches our children about the justice, by broadcasting a biography of a prominent celebrity and appreciating the responsibility of polices. Perhaps most importantly, television as a perfect teacher, lead us to perceive the subtle relationship of the world, which completely influence the whole life.
On the other hand, it is essential not to take this assertion too far. As my mother said, telephone also has effect a change of our lives. However, I believe the influence of telephone is relatively low. As a substitute for a letter and telegram, telephones enhance the communication efficiency. Compared to the influence of television, telephone may seem a little neglected.