Posts by kr2426

kr2426

May 21, 2008

Undergraduate / "If time travel were possible..." - help with this essay [2]

If time travel were possible, to what time period and place in history would you return to live? Give reasons for your decision to live in this period and location.

If I could travel through time to any period and place, I would choose the Independence Era in British India. The reason I would choose this time period is because it shows the resilience of the humankind.

"Man never made any material as resilient as the human spirit." Bern William's once said, and I believe this to be very true. It amazes me that that in the midst of great overwhelming sorrow such great people have not only been born but still influence people today with their courage and perseverance. Look at Gandhi. Even though he held no official or political position he managed to bring the British Empire to its knees, all through his great moral courage and perseverance.

As we read through our history books, we are transformed, at least temporarily, by the inspiration of such courage, and moved by such incredible acts of service and character. And it would be incredible to experience this for myself.

Please let me know what you think. The word limit is 250.

kr2426

May 26, 2008

Undergraduate / "my family's enterprise" - influenced by family history, culture, or environment. [NEW]

How have you been influenced by your family history or culture, or the family environment you grew up in? You might consider "who you are" as an individual, what values you hold, and what goals you plan to pursue. Word Limit is 250.

I have been nurtured within a family enterprise established a few decades ago. The group deals with the production and marketing of recycled based products to companies. By being able to work experience as a summer trainee in my mother's company has further strengthened my desire to learn more about the environment so that I can bring a comprehensive set of skills to traditional systems. This is the long-term, the future.

To achieve this, I need to rely on relevant experiences that foray into a combination of experience, hard-work and initiative. Through the long hours spent in meetings and the research facilities, not only did I gain a significant exposure about the environment, I also learnt a lot about hard-work and dedication. I learnt about initiative and resourcefulness from my parents, who are my biggest motivation. Whether in school or at work, whenever I made a wrong choice or waited for someone else to make things happen, they always inspired me to take the initiative to get things done.

Being a part of my family's enterprise has fuelled my interest in the effect of the world on the environment. In the future, I hope to see myself doing research in this field for the better development of recycled products. UT has an incredible environmental science program that can aid in the pursuit of my dreams. I would like nothing better than to seize the opportunity to contribute positively towards campus life in ways that I am capable of, and take advantage of the wealth that an UT education has to offer.

I would really appreciate your view on this essay. Thanks!

kr2426

Jun 22, 2008

Letters / My dream university - admission appeal [5]

Hi. I recently got rejected from my dream University and I wanted to appeal their decision. Could you please help me with this. I think the basis of their decision was a dip in my grades. I have extremely good SAT scores and high school GPA. My college GPA did suffer but now I have extremely good grades. How do I go about writing this? Thank you in advance for your help.

kr2426

Jun 25, 2008

Letters / My dream university - admission appeal [5]

To Whom It May Concern:

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Thank you so much for your help Gloria! Do you think I have made a convincing argument? Also, I would like them to know that I have more grades, which will be available after July 25th, which will work in my favor. Unfortunately I have a feeling if I let them know that they will ask me to defer my admission to the next term which I do not want to do. Should I include that as well?

kr2426

Jun 26, 2008

Letters / My dream university - admission appeal [5]

Hi! Do you think this final draft is good? Thank you again!

To Whom It May Concern:

First, I wish to thank you for taking the time to reexamine your decision. I recently applied for admission to UC as a transfer student. My intended major is Environmental Science. Sadly, I received a notification declining my admission to the school.

As soon as I learned about this I got in touch with an International Admission counselor with regards to my application, whose warm and friendly advice made all the difference. I was informed that there is a minimum GPA required by all transfer students to attend your prestigious university, and at the time my GPA was not within that range. With this, I would like to draw your attention to my good SAT score and high school grades which seem to be off mark from my college GPR. As an international student, I had a difficult time adjusting to life in college; I was new to this learning and living environment and thus I let my GPR suffer; I joined too many organizations in hope of conforming to my new life and as a result I focused much of my time on adjusting rather than my GPR, which at that time I felt the former was more important.

I have accepted my mistakes and have tried my best to improve. I got organized and improved my time management skills so that when I'm in that situation again, my grades will not suffer because I know how to get through it. I have joined only those organizations that I am passionate about. I have struck a balance between my academics and extra-curricular activities. The most important thing I have learnt is to ask for help when I need it. This has not only helped my GPA improve but also has made me feel more involved in overall college life. Since then, my grades have improved tremendously and I am confident they will continue to do so.

As an indication of my readiness for academic success I have included class grades from math classes I took during the winter-mester. My grades from the summer term will be available by August. I feel that this will increase my GPR considerably. I have also included references from teachers, and my resume, of whom you may not have had previous access to.

To conclude, I have a very keen interest in experiencing life at this university. That is why I want to continue to work hard and attend your university. I would like nothing better than to seize the opportunity to contribute positively towards campus life in various ways, and take advantage of the wealth that a UC education has to offer.

Thank you very much for your time. I look forward to your judgment on my application.