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Pr09   
Aug 18, 2010
Student Talk / What are the jobs prospects for BA(Economics and social studies) (Hons)? [7]

I will be entering university life in one month time, and I am still wondering whether I made the right choice or not. Though I got admitted in one the most prestigious universities in the UK, many people are advising me to change field. They say that an award in BA (Economics and social studies) (Hons) is not good enough to have a bright career, that is, which will reap a lot of money. Some say that LLB is more fruitful. Can anyone please advise me on what I should be doing? Thanks!
Pr09   
Aug 20, 2010
Undergraduate / My mom - Most influential person essay [4]

but the most influential person to me out of all of them is my mom .

but the one who influences me the most is my mum.

My mom has earned this right because I feel that she is the picture you see, when you think of a strong independent woman

...because she reflects the picture of a strong and independent woman.

Her strength comes from within and you can tell when you when you talk to her, not to mention when you hear what she has done.

Her strength comes from the fire within her, acquired by all the hardships she has faced.

The reason I look at her and see is strength is the fact

The reason I admire her strength is the fact...

My mom is an example of in dependence in how she was able to be a single mother of three and still maintained a great life with little help.

You have already mentioned independence.
You can rather say: She is an example of a great mother who has reared three children on her own, and who has yet lived a good life with the help of few.

She has taught me by working hard and keeping yourself focused anything, is possible.

She made me understand the quote 'When there is a will, there is a way', and this surely did make a difference to me. I always focus on whatever I want to excel.

I admire my mother for the compassion she is able to give to others.

I admire her for the compassion she has to others.

The way she can take her experiences and apply them to help other shows how she cares.

The way she relates her experiences and her perception on others' problems, she is able to help them, thus showing her carefulness.

and helped guide her to get out of that relationship.

...advised her and brought her back on the right track.

All of these characteristics from my mom have shaped me and made me the person I am today and that is why I look at my mom as the most influential person in my life.

My mum's qualities have contributed towards my well upbringing and whenever I call her 'mum', I feel proud for the great person she is and made me become.

You have used 'mom' too many times.
Pr09   
Aug 30, 2010
Writing Feedback / Mistakes in the tenses, could you check these sentences and their verbs? [3]

had already got there.

You can say either 'had already arrived there' or ' were already there'

I spent the first couple of hours just looking at all the different styles of clothes that people were wearing and the amazing hairstyles they had.

I spent the first couple of hours looking at the different clothing styles that people had and the amazing hairstyles they had.

we joined a huge crowd of people

we entered a huge crowd or joined a group of people or got into a huge crowd

I realized I wanted to go

lol, realize.. I needed to go to the toilet.

It took about ten minutes to walk to the toilets and..

It took me around ten minutes walk to reach the toilets, but a long queue awaited me there.

who had been looking for me ages!

ages.. no, rather 'looking for me for so long.

'Where did you disappear to?'

Where had you disappeared?
or
Where had you been?
or
Where were you?
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