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Indonesia public may feel happy since Komodo Dragon Park was selected as the one of the seven wonders of nature in the world by new seven wonders foundation on Friday (Saturday morning local time) although this announcement is still temporary because the formal celebration will be conducted on early January 2011. Komodo Park's victory is inseparable of the role of Indonesians and world citizens who have given support Komodo Dragon Park in order to be the winner of this competition.
Being the world's new seven natural wonders prove Indonesia has something wonderful and can be showed off to the public in the world, not only such bad things as bribery and corruption rate, criminality, terrorism, poverty, disaster, and so forth which appeared but also the good ones. Nevertheless, there is a consideration must be paid attention by government in encountering the victory. The consideration is not to exploit Komodo Dragon Park for business only but must consider conservation.
The Komodo Dragon Park which becomes the member of the world's new seven wonders will bring fortune for Indonesia especially for the development of tourism in East Nusa Tenggara because it will make the Komodo Dragon Park will bee much more famous and attract many tourists to come NTT. The implication will be very good to develop the economic for the citizens who live around the Komodo Dragon Park.
In 21st Century, Tourism industry play significant role to develop economic sector a state. It becomes mainstay to contribute economic development so that it should be develop continuously (Suara Merdeka, 3/11/11). Moreover, seeing the economic condition of East Nusa Tenggara is very low. Many poor family live there and there are so many remote region. If the government develops the tourism industry in East Nusa Tenggara seriously, it will attract so many tourists that will support economy of East Nusa Tenggara Citizen.
How to make The Komodo Dragon Park can be famous tourist resort with many visitors?. Infrastructures such as hotel, air port, harbor have to be built and means of transportation must be added because it is important to make the tourists feel comfortable and easier to reach the Komodo Dragon Park. Then how the expense to build the infrastructure can be achieved?. It is needed investor either from government or private investor.
Ready Komodo island became one of the seven wonders of the world?
Then how to make Komodo island could become a bustling tourist visitors.Firsly, Infrastructure needs to be built because it is impossible to develop tourism without infrastructure support. Infrastructures that need to be built there are the inn, airport, and means of transportation. Then how the cost to build the infrastructure can be achieved?. It Needs investment from private parties or government. To achieve this goal there must be a vigorous campaign for many tourists who come to later, the results of management can be used to build the infrastructure that was there. As a former vice president Yusuf Kalla and chairman of committee Winning Komodo Island (P2K), Emy Hafild that with their enthusiasm campaign komodo island in hopes of eventually become a tourist attraction with many visitors and the results of its management could be for the welfare of residents in East Nusa Tenggara where environmental conditions that exist there heat and no nothing.
According to the Putra Sastrawan, an environmental expert in an interview on Radio Elshinta News Sunday, November 13, 2011 declared a state of Komodo in Indonesia is still suffering, Based on his research, komodo dragons are there in a state of starvation because of reduced food supplies there. Komodo is included in the meat-eating animals need other animals to prey. Therefore there should be preservation of the natural environment in the island of Komodoin order to Komodo island ecosystems remain in balance. It is very necessary attention by the government of the island of Komodo After later actually became one of the seven wonders of the world and is well known that tourism will certainly attract many tourists.
One more thing to consider in the promotion of the island of Komodo that is if the promotion is done only to attract tourists will bring bad impact on the conservation of Komodo itself. This is in line with what is delivered by environmental experts from the University of Indonesia Jatna Supratna stating that there will be no significant change if the proceeds from the promotion of the island of Komodo just for tourism, but should be balanced between promotion and conservation of Komodo Island, too. Will not matter if there tourism growing but nonetheless later extinct Komodo Island travelers will ultimately not interested in the island of Komodo.
So the government in this term, ministry of tourism and creative economy must really manage the island of Komodo as well. Both of tourism development and conservation. Do not just eager for economic interests but the conservation is ignored.