Writing Feedback / curriculum vitae - my first essay [5]

curriculum vitae

1 month ago I had to write a short essay about my education, my goals, about myself in order to pass an entry to test to start studying. Well, what shall I say, the result was really disillusioning. I had the chance to have my test bespoken with a teacher of this school and he told me that my result was under average, especially the essay and that's the most horrible thing in my opinion. But there is still light at the end of the tunnel because I've got a second chance due to a reexamination. I'm not in school anymore so I don't have an English teacher or something but at least I have the Internet and I'm willing to work my butt off to pass the test with the second attempt.

So I want to start with my first essay in this forum (kindly supported by leo.org):

I was born in 1984 in a small town in Switzerland. I've grown up passing through elementary school and upper stage. Then I started an apprenticeship in the IT sector. While I have been apprentice I started to recognize that I'm not really a technician. Ever since I can remember I've been interested in languages and I've always thought that I'm talented in them.

After my apprenticeship I worked with an IT company for 2 years when I finally took a decision: Start a new education and study English and French.

That's what I did but unfortunately I didn't achieve what I set out to do. I didn't pass the entry test. Nevertheless I'm still motivated to improve my language skills and pass the test the second time.

It's the first time I've really known what I want to do in the future. I love languages and I'm on the point of mastering them. First I focus on English and French and with a further step I would love to learn a, let's say, more "exotic" language, like for example Russian or Japanese.

Remark: I haven't been often in touch with English for the last three years but I think writing is the most promising to improve one's language skills.

Writing Feedback / European Championship - football essay [4]

Hi everyone. As you may notice i am not a native speaker. So please forgive me my lack of knowledge I'm trying to improve my English skills.

My text is a little report about how I experienced the tournament in my hometown Zurich, in Switzerland.

European Championship

It's about two weeks ago when a great football competition took place in Austria and Switzerland; the European Championship. It has been one of the best competitions I have ever seen in my life. Not only because it took place in my hometown Zurich, it is also because the spectators had been experienced some fascinating games. The atmosphere has been fantastic; there is no doubt about that. Even in the densest crowd I did not get witness to aggressivity and that is something that amazed me. I remember one game I really enjoyed. I and some friends were watching the Netherlands playing against world champion Italy. We had been supporting team Holland among hundreds of Italian fans. We won this game in a spectacular way which made the Netherlands at one blow count to the top favourites of the competition. Anyway after the match the Italian fans had been celebrating together with us.

Well after the qualification round the Netherlands were stopped by the Russians what made me really sad because the Russians had been playing better by far and I did not recognize my team, which had been playing incredibly until that day, anymore.

In the end the Russians had been beaten by Spain which continued its way to the top by defeating Germany in an exciting final. I am glad that Spain has made it after my favourite teams, Netherland and Switzerland, had been eliminated. I strongly hope that the Netherland will win one of the next football competitions no matter if it is World Cup or European Championship. But in the eyes of many it is much harder to achieve the victory in the European Championship than in the World Cup. That is also my opinion because each and every nation that has made its way to the tournament is one of the best teams in the world. Beside Brazil and Argentina all the top nations of football participate in that great event normally.

It will always remain a thing to me I won't understand why football is not that popular in the USA despite it is almost everywhere else the number one sport. When I was younger I was a great Basketball Fan and I even stayed up at night (3 A.M) to watch the Chicago Bulls win three in a row. But while growing older football gained on basketball until getting my one and only number one.

Writing Feedback / Television essay - "It is all about TV" [3]

Just another short essay about Television in general.

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It is all about TV

As television appeared in full colour the triumphal procession of movies began. Families started to have dinner in front of the TV, discussions in the family about what had been happening during ones day diminished. At one stroke TV became the centre of family life, it was attached great importance to have a nice TV with a big screen and a good sound system. I think people did not recognize how important their TVs were to them until they had broken down and people did not know anymore what to do with each other. TV had become a member of the family and not for just a few it was one of the most important ones.

In a gradual process a change of thinking took place in the mind of people. The society had recognized the negative aspects of TV and started to attach lesser value to them. At least they tried it. It will probably never be possible to imagine a life without TVs but I know many people today who do not even possess one. Well, most of them use to surf a lot abroad the Internet but that is another story.

Basically I think TV is something very useful. I'm thinking of great entertainment which blockbusters like StarWars have brought to me. I'm thinking also of the ability to watch the news all over to world and that in the language of my choice. But I would never commit the mistake to underestimate (no, not the force) the negative influence to children which TV may have. Consumed in moderation TV may help to develop children language skills in my opinion. But if a kid starts to cry because of a broken TV or if the child prefers watching TV instead of playing outside with other children then something went wrong.