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Oct 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / My Struggle to Achieve Greatness: Law School Personal Essay-Looking for feedback [3]
My Struggle to Achieve Greatness
"I've failed over and over and over again in my life and that is why I succeed." -Michael Jordan.
I chose that quote because it best describes my struggle and what I will achieve. The only way to begin anything I guess is from the beginning. This essay will show my struggles, my triumphs, and my road to a life long goal.
In 1995 I got my high school diploma which was a struggle for me because I became a parent for the first time. At that time in my life graduation was not an option my parents pushed me to at least graduate high school. I have always wanted more for myself, my dream as a kid was to become an attorney. I use to read books about Thurgood Marshall and I knew one day I would sit on the Supreme Court. People would say if you have a kid you should just give up on your dreams of becoming a lawyer. I decided that I would go to a community college first just to get a feel for college. I did what most kids did at 19 years old I played around and did not take college seriously. When I realized that I had allowed myself to get so far behind I stopped going. I decided hey I will just find a job and take care of my baby. I found myself working for this company for about 6years and I felt like so unhappy. I wanted more so in 2005 I decided to go back to school. By the time I had decided to go back to school I was now a single mother of four children. I always tell my children how important going to college is and how education is something no one can ever take from you. I felt like a hypocrite because I did not finish college. I enrolled into college to get a bachelor's degree in Business Management. I was determined to do better than I had done my first go around in college. This time I was working full time and I had my children but I was determined to succeed. It was not easy I struggled, cried, and fell a couple of times, but I was not giving up this time. June 16, 2007 was one of the best days of my life it is funny just writing about I still get emotional. I was able to walk across that stage at the Liacouras Center in front of my children and received my bachelor's degree. I was so over-whelmed with tears of joy because for me it was a long hard road. Now it is my goal to achieve a life long goal of going to Law School. I can only achieve success this time because I have made it through adversity.
Fredrick Douglas said "We have to do with the past only as we can make it useful to the present and future." I know what I have been through and I have learned from my failures; so I plan to use my past experiences to become a good law student and a great attorney.
am looking for some feedback on my essay.
My Struggle to Achieve Greatness
"I've failed over and over and over again in my life and that is why I succeed." -Michael Jordan.
I chose that quote because it best describes my struggle and what I will achieve. The only way to begin anything I guess is from the beginning. This essay will show my struggles, my triumphs, and my road to a life long goal.
In 1995 I got my high school diploma which was a struggle for me because I became a parent for the first time. At that time in my life graduation was not an option my parents pushed me to at least graduate high school. I have always wanted more for myself, my dream as a kid was to become an attorney. I use to read books about Thurgood Marshall and I knew one day I would sit on the Supreme Court. People would say if you have a kid you should just give up on your dreams of becoming a lawyer. I decided that I would go to a community college first just to get a feel for college. I did what most kids did at 19 years old I played around and did not take college seriously. When I realized that I had allowed myself to get so far behind I stopped going. I decided hey I will just find a job and take care of my baby. I found myself working for this company for about 6years and I felt like so unhappy. I wanted more so in 2005 I decided to go back to school. By the time I had decided to go back to school I was now a single mother of four children. I always tell my children how important going to college is and how education is something no one can ever take from you. I felt like a hypocrite because I did not finish college. I enrolled into college to get a bachelor's degree in Business Management. I was determined to do better than I had done my first go around in college. This time I was working full time and I had my children but I was determined to succeed. It was not easy I struggled, cried, and fell a couple of times, but I was not giving up this time. June 16, 2007 was one of the best days of my life it is funny just writing about I still get emotional. I was able to walk across that stage at the Liacouras Center in front of my children and received my bachelor's degree. I was so over-whelmed with tears of joy because for me it was a long hard road. Now it is my goal to achieve a life long goal of going to Law School. I can only achieve success this time because I have made it through adversity.
Fredrick Douglas said "We have to do with the past only as we can make it useful to the present and future." I know what I have been through and I have learned from my failures; so I plan to use my past experiences to become a good law student and a great attorney.
am looking for some feedback on my essay.