seamusb
Oct 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "Math, science, and finding all the views and data" - Diversity essay [5]
Please critique my essay!
Prompt for Boulder - how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?
Diversity is the quintessential element to all higher education, and job environments. In all decisions, diversity is the key to successful answers. The act of collecting different views results in flawless solutions to any problem.
Ever since I began learning science, and math I have naturally taken interest in finding all the views and data on a subject before making a conclusion. Whether it be scholastic or an everyday life occurrence I have always felt the need to uncover all the viewpoints before beginning to form a solution. The diversity within me lies in the way I respect not only racial, and religious diversity, but also diverse views on attitude, knowledge, and behavior in order to create an identity that is not just me but a me that transforms during every enlightening experience I undergo. Throughout high school I have oddly enough always like assigned lab partners. For me, it is better to sit with someone that is your complete opposite rather than a close friend. In particular my tenth grade honors chemistry lab partner and I were essentially antonyms for one another. I was a liberal, outgoing person, and she a conservative, secluded individual. Through the first quarter our contrasting views managed to get us the best, thoroughly earned grades. In no time at all my partner and I began talking to one another in the halls, during which I saw got to see her personal views and standpoints. Later that year I began realizing certain views of mine had changed, and acquired new knowledge on why conservatives stand the way they do. Past interactions and experiences shape the person you are and I make sure to never miss any opportunity.
During the September of 2009 I began the search for a job after having my newly acquired license, as the need for a car in my spread out suburban community. Initially I applied to about thirty very different businesses, from Boarders bookstore to the local breakfast spot. I anxiously awaited answers, but nothing, so I revisited all my potential jobs and asked about openings with a grim result everywhere. All the possible jobs in my area where already taken, or had been cut due to the recession. Before long I was presented with the opportunity of working on a farm. The Idea seemed very new to me and in essence the kind of living I had never been exposed to. I showed up one day and they put me right to work. I had never imagined ever doing something like this, and the result was fascinating. It gave me a completely new perspective on how people can live. The farm family devoted all hours to their day to the farm, I gained a huge appreciation for how hard working farmers are. To this day I am still working at the farm and although it is something nothing like my personality or plan for the future the enjoyment of seeing a new kind of life for 4 days a week drives me to want to work hard in the path I am choosing to take at higher education, and to continue my appreciation for diversity.
Please critique my essay!
Prompt for Boulder - how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?
Diversity is the quintessential element to all higher education, and job environments. In all decisions, diversity is the key to successful answers. The act of collecting different views results in flawless solutions to any problem.
Ever since I began learning science, and math I have naturally taken interest in finding all the views and data on a subject before making a conclusion. Whether it be scholastic or an everyday life occurrence I have always felt the need to uncover all the viewpoints before beginning to form a solution. The diversity within me lies in the way I respect not only racial, and religious diversity, but also diverse views on attitude, knowledge, and behavior in order to create an identity that is not just me but a me that transforms during every enlightening experience I undergo. Throughout high school I have oddly enough always like assigned lab partners. For me, it is better to sit with someone that is your complete opposite rather than a close friend. In particular my tenth grade honors chemistry lab partner and I were essentially antonyms for one another. I was a liberal, outgoing person, and she a conservative, secluded individual. Through the first quarter our contrasting views managed to get us the best, thoroughly earned grades. In no time at all my partner and I began talking to one another in the halls, during which I saw got to see her personal views and standpoints. Later that year I began realizing certain views of mine had changed, and acquired new knowledge on why conservatives stand the way they do. Past interactions and experiences shape the person you are and I make sure to never miss any opportunity.
During the September of 2009 I began the search for a job after having my newly acquired license, as the need for a car in my spread out suburban community. Initially I applied to about thirty very different businesses, from Boarders bookstore to the local breakfast spot. I anxiously awaited answers, but nothing, so I revisited all my potential jobs and asked about openings with a grim result everywhere. All the possible jobs in my area where already taken, or had been cut due to the recession. Before long I was presented with the opportunity of working on a farm. The Idea seemed very new to me and in essence the kind of living I had never been exposed to. I showed up one day and they put me right to work. I had never imagined ever doing something like this, and the result was fascinating. It gave me a completely new perspective on how people can live. The farm family devoted all hours to their day to the farm, I gained a huge appreciation for how hard working farmers are. To this day I am still working at the farm and although it is something nothing like my personality or plan for the future the enjoyment of seeing a new kind of life for 4 days a week drives me to want to work hard in the path I am choosing to take at higher education, and to continue my appreciation for diversity.