Writing Feedback / Nature and nurture - are people born for certain talents? [NEW]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The extent of importance of natural talent and training regarding the matter of being a successful and good in any specific sector, such as, to be a good musician and sports man is a controversial issue till date. This essay will discuss both of the issues.

Training and exercise is the indispensable aspects of being a competent in one's professional life since it is believed than practice make a man perfect. A proper regular exercise can help even an ordinary person to surmount his inefficiency and upgrade this skill to be an extra-ordinary person. In addition, the education system also supports the training system for learning and acquiring different skills.

On the other hand, those who are defenders of the above opinion also find a firm ground for their thought. To begin with the fact that, there are some people those are fortunate enough to be endowed by natural talent, though the number is very few. Besides, the real life shows that those who have innate quality in any specific sector able to reach the apex of success in that sector naturally.

For instance, Bethoven serve as typical example in this issue. He was deaf but managed to compose beautiful music with the gift of the god and considered greatest musician of all the time.

On balance, it is important to nurture his natural intelligence through training and persistent exercise. Natural instinct often becomes emaciated due to negligence and lack of getting privilege of proper training. In contrast, the people who are not bestowed by the natural talent reach the epitome of success with perseverance and training.

Finally, it is the endeavor, passion and practice that make a person successful. A man with talent bestowed by god is unlikely to become a star without practice, or even without being given a good chance.

Writing Feedback / Fixed Punishment Vs Discretionary Punishment - Discuss [NEW]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

Discuss Both these view and give your own opinion.

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The vulnerable situation of the law and order in our country signifies the importance of the justified punishment for criminal activities. Besides, there is an on going debate on two thoughts of people. Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime and other state that the circumstances of an individual should be considered in case of deciding punishment. I definitely support the second notion of setting up individual's punishment concerning their circumstances and motivation of committing the crime. In the following paragraphs I put forth my arguments to support my views.

To begin with, stringent punishment sometime incurs deterring situation in the society. It is, therefore, important to make a scrutiny on the circumstances of committing misdeeds of the perpetrator of crime. For instance, self defense killer is not as dangerous as serial killer. The convicts of both of the transgression will be sentenced to death. Nevertheless, the atrocity of the crime is not same. There should be an exemption category in the punishment decision. The crime that is committed accidentally or not deliberately should be exempted.

In addition, most of the times the poor powerless people misleadingly get accused of a crime and lead their whole life in imprisonment while the actual perpetrator could get parole and make him out of prison by using power. Hence, the motivation should be taken into account when deciding on punishment.

On the other hand, those who are defender of the above opinion also find firm ground for their thought. The deterring situation that occurs due to fixed punishment is beneficial to keep peace in the society by establishing stable law and order situation. The harsh stringent penalty for crime abstain the crook to do such misdeed.

On balance, to improve the law and order system, it is obligatory to execute firm punishment concerning the circumstances and motivation of the perpetrator of the crime.