JeromeM
Nov 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "it is about ski" - the commonapp 150words short answer [4]
it is about ski, but I think the ending should be improved and some unneceessary part should be deleted. Maybe the beginning should be revised too. anyway, just please give me some comments, thanks a lot!
A perfect parabola swept over the snow-white world and that meteor was me.
I started skiing when I was in primary school. I can still remember the first time I wore the ski boot--the tight feeling around my shins increased the tension deep inside my heart. And the nervousness get even worse as I standing on the top of the small hill since I am a little acrophobic. I stood still Looking down at the height under my feet until my classmate playfully pushed me down. Wind whipped through my coat and tore at my face. I wanted to stop, but the board attached to my feet just go down faster and faster. I arrived at the foot of the hill, surprisingly, without a tumble. It's amazing! Skiing seems to be intimidating at first, but the excitement after landing at the foot keeps me do it again and again.
it is about ski, but I think the ending should be improved and some unneceessary part should be deleted. Maybe the beginning should be revised too. anyway, just please give me some comments, thanks a lot!
A perfect parabola swept over the snow-white world and that meteor was me.
I started skiing when I was in primary school. I can still remember the first time I wore the ski boot--the tight feeling around my shins increased the tension deep inside my heart. And the nervousness get even worse as I standing on the top of the small hill since I am a little acrophobic. I stood still Looking down at the height under my feet until my classmate playfully pushed me down. Wind whipped through my coat and tore at my face. I wanted to stop, but the board attached to my feet just go down faster and faster. I arrived at the foot of the hill, surprisingly, without a tumble. It's amazing! Skiing seems to be intimidating at first, but the excitement after landing at the foot keeps me do it again and again.