Writing Feedback / Raw food vs Cooked food - How's my intro? [13]

How about a quote to make it more interesting...
Here is an example.
"There is no sincerer love than the love of food." -George Bernard Shaw

Also alway spell out all the words...
don't = do not
they're = they are

Writing Feedback / Raw food vs Cooked food - How's my intro? [13]

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Here is my revision...

People do not know true benefits of raw food. Instead, they prefer cooked or processed food that lacks of nutrients. People do not realize how harmful cooked or processed food could be to human body. They believe cooked food is safer and has more nutrients than raw food, but in reality, cooked food has most of the nutrients destroyed due to the heat. Moreover, cooking destroys the live enzymes that aid in digestion and health. .

" If you eat food that is enzyme-less, your body will not get maximum utilization of the food. This causes toxicity in the body. (Can you guess why over 75% of Americans are overweight?)" -The Living and Raw Foods F.A.Q. What format are you using? Make sure to use the correct citation.

As many scientific researches attest, eating raw food can prevent diseases and contains more nutrients than cooked or processed food.

Hope this helps...

Writing Feedback / Raw food vs Cooked food - How's my intro? [13]

Nothing is wrong with it but what I meant was just make sure to use correct citation that your instructor requires you to use.