Undergraduate / U.C Prompt #2 "How teachers gives 'persistence' " [4]

My English is not as great as i want it to be, coming from an immigrant. Any grammatical and constructive criticism are grateful.

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

When I moved to California with my mom and my two brothers, it was the last thing on my mind because California was nothing but a name and a new "home." Even though I lived in Chinatown Los Angeles for only a year, I remembered the unstable wooden steps I would have to traverse to get down...

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Thanks:)!