CorinneDavid
Nov 20, 2010
Undergraduate / My Italian Grandmother.... - help on UC Essays [5]
Please provide feedback. I'm trying to balance this essay with essay #2, which will focus on my sports achievements and character. Thanks! CorinneDavid
prompt: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
A Person Who Inspires Me
My Grandmother
Here I am, right in the middle of it all. Exchanging warm embraces and inviting smiles, my family joined at our home base, my Grandparent's house. It was during a recent dinner at Grandmother's house that I realized how deeply she has shaped my life. My grandmother's values of a well-prepared meal, a gathered family, a dog by her side and a positive outlook on life would become my values as a young adult, readying myself for college.
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Please provide feedback. I'm trying to balance this essay with essay #2, which will focus on my sports achievements and character. Thanks! CorinneDavid
prompt: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
A Person Who Inspires Me
My Grandmother
Here I am, right in the middle of it all. Exchanging warm embraces and inviting smiles, my family joined at our home base, my Grandparent's house. It was during a recent dinner at Grandmother's house that I realized how deeply she has shaped my life. My grandmother's values of a well-prepared meal, a gathered family, a dog by her side and a positive outlook on life would become my values as a young adult, readying myself for college.
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