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Nov 21, 2010
Undergraduate / "problems in our interdependent world" - Wellesley Supplement [6]
'When choosing a college, you are choosing an intellectual community and a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. To this end, the Board of Admission is interested in knowing your reasons for applying to Wellesley College and how Wellesley will help you to realize your personal and academic goals.' This response sohuld be limited to two paragraphs.
This is my Wellesley Supplement. I feel like it is really bad and fraught with grammatical errors. I would really appreciate it if people can help me and look over it! Thank you so much!
When I was seven years old, I learned that my mother studied International Relations when she was young. At that time, I didn't care much for what she studied. Little did I know that years later, I would travel thousands of miles away from home, and study at an international school. Living in Beijing, China for two years opened a door for me. I entered a room of cultural diversity that emanated from the mélange of students. The enhancement of my learning experience propelled me to look for what I was passionate about. To me, things break, get lost, stolen, become old and boring, but I will never lose the memories of exploring the beauty of diverse cultures.
The complexity and diversity of Wellesley is what propelled me to apply. I aspire and dream to study International Relations from both perspectives of social sciences and humanities. After unveiling my passion for international development, I realized that Wellesley is a school that will enable me to look deeper into the new, posing problems in our interdependent world. I am driven to see international development and hope to have more opportunities to recognize myself in others. Wellesley College will help me develop the critical and analytical skills requisite to interpret the world. Next year, I know I will be able to immerse myself in a diverse and inclusive community, thus commencing my dreams and aspirations. I am eager to look out of my local community and find our universal potential.
'When choosing a college, you are choosing an intellectual community and a place where you believe that you can live, learn, and flourish. To this end, the Board of Admission is interested in knowing your reasons for applying to Wellesley College and how Wellesley will help you to realize your personal and academic goals.' This response sohuld be limited to two paragraphs.
This is my Wellesley Supplement. I feel like it is really bad and fraught with grammatical errors. I would really appreciate it if people can help me and look over it! Thank you so much!
When I was seven years old, I learned that my mother studied International Relations when she was young. At that time, I didn't care much for what she studied. Little did I know that years later, I would travel thousands of miles away from home, and study at an international school. Living in Beijing, China for two years opened a door for me. I entered a room of cultural diversity that emanated from the mélange of students. The enhancement of my learning experience propelled me to look for what I was passionate about. To me, things break, get lost, stolen, become old and boring, but I will never lose the memories of exploring the beauty of diverse cultures.
The complexity and diversity of Wellesley is what propelled me to apply. I aspire and dream to study International Relations from both perspectives of social sciences and humanities. After unveiling my passion for international development, I realized that Wellesley is a school that will enable me to look deeper into the new, posing problems in our interdependent world. I am driven to see international development and hope to have more opportunities to recognize myself in others. Wellesley College will help me develop the critical and analytical skills requisite to interpret the world. Next year, I know I will be able to immerse myself in a diverse and inclusive community, thus commencing my dreams and aspirations. I am eager to look out of my local community and find our universal potential.