Undergraduate / "my skateboard headed to my sanctuary" (who I am - suggestions/opinions) [3]

i dont really agree what the person before me put about needing to write about the "human world." there isnt a wrong way to describe your world, because everyones world is different. and your topic is fine. no need to change it!

this is really well written and you did a great job of describing your world (skateboarding) and what it means to you. You also talked about how it has affected you in a positive way which is good. However, you didnt really answer part 2 of the prompt. You need to write about how your love for skateboarding has shaped your dreams/aspirations. they dont have to be specific career goals or anything you can just simply write about idk how you hope to one day teach (your little bro or cousin) how to skateboard so they too can gain stuff out of it haha idk. or you can talk about how you hope to never lose your passion for riding . idk though sorry i cant think of anything good haha