Undergraduate / Intellectual Vitality - Stanford "Supreme Court Project" [4]

i dig it! you could maybe take out "to say the least", "glance"
would you mind reading my essay?
cheers!

Undergraduate / Grandpa's Pills- Why I Want to Be a Pharmacist -Common App Essay [3]

Nice essay. My favorite sentence is "'when' happened." It's pretty powerful.
This essay shows that you are compassionate, and I like that you undergo an obvious change over the course of the essay.
The last sentence seems like a bit of an exaggeration though; you never really express a feeling of "goal-lesness" or "perspective-lesness," if you know what I mean. Please excuse my made up words :-). Maybe you could change it around a bit. Hope that helps! Would you mind checking out my essay?

Cheers.