rubberducky7129
Dec 12, 2010
Undergraduate / "My decision to travel to Spain this summer" - personal experience- Pliability [4]
I would appreciate any feedback on my common application essay on the topic of an experience in my life that led to a personal change.
Also, I have heard that writing about sports and/ or travel is cliche, any thoughts about this?
Thank you for taking the time to comment.
Pliability
As the pain in my shoulder steadily progressed, my hopes of playing volleyball without
a persistent feeling of frustration began to diminish at the same rate. The hours spent trapped
in the perpetual cycle of taping, icing, and rehabilitating seemed futile, as the rush of joy and
adrenaline that I had always felt when stepping on the court was replaced by a constant
fear of furthering my injury. This growing obstacle led me to reach a turning point.
I realized that if I continued down this road, the injury that had marked my volleyball career
would continue to affect me, and it scared me to think that I would leave high school
with regret for allowing myself to be held back by circumstances that were beyond my
control. Instead, I turned in a new direction and began to search for an alternative, for once
allowing myself to explore interests outside of the familiar world of volleyball.
...
I would appreciate any feedback on my common application essay on the topic of an experience in my life that led to a personal change.
Also, I have heard that writing about sports and/ or travel is cliche, any thoughts about this?
Thank you for taking the time to comment.
Pliability
As the pain in my shoulder steadily progressed, my hopes of playing volleyball without
a persistent feeling of frustration began to diminish at the same rate. The hours spent trapped
in the perpetual cycle of taping, icing, and rehabilitating seemed futile, as the rush of joy and
adrenaline that I had always felt when stepping on the court was replaced by a constant
fear of furthering my injury. This growing obstacle led me to reach a turning point.
I realized that if I continued down this road, the injury that had marked my volleyball career
would continue to affect me, and it scared me to think that I would leave high school
with regret for allowing myself to be held back by circumstances that were beyond my
control. Instead, I turned in a new direction and began to search for an alternative, for once
allowing myself to explore interests outside of the familiar world of volleyball.
...