Undergraduate / "Twelve years in Thailand" - Bryn Mawr - What I will gain and contribute [4]

Twelve years in Thailand has pretty much shaped my background, and simultaneously, my years in an international school have had such a huge influence on me. My experience in a community of international teachers and friends has taught me to appreciate and embrace different cultures. As of now, I believe that I am a truly international student. Although I still practice my country's traditional values, there are often times when I see myself with opinions that contradict values of my home country. I believe that in the community of Bryn Mawr, my experience and values will add up to its diversity.

Despite its beautiful campus, excellent location, and outstanding academic reputation, the number one reason that I chose Bryn Mawr is it promises to prepare and teach students how to think and reason in the outside world. After all, knowledge alone cannot complete a high quality scholar, and Bryn Mawr understands that idea. In addition, in a community of intellectual and strong women, I believe that I will be given wide range of chances that other institutions will not be able to offer.

I understand that when a college looks for a student, it looks for an individual who can make contributions to different areas, and without any doubt, it is the same for a student. Attending college during the most enthusiastic and active period of life is a once in a lifetime chance, and I know that I will have a full college experience at Bryn Mawr.

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Undergraduate / "talent, enjoyment, and career" - Johns Hopkins (Why International Studies?) [5]

why did you choose this major?

I personally believe that when choosing a major, there are three things that must be met: talent, enjoyment, and career. Talent alone cannot be a reason good enough for me to decide on a major because I may be good at it but not find it interesting and vice versa. In addition, I do not see why I will have to major in a field that does not relate to the job I want to have in the future.

I know that I will enjoy majoring in International Studies from my experience in Model United Nations and Politics class, and from what I have seen on my report cards, I am pretty good at social studies. I love the atmosphere and enthusiasm when people speak out their thoughts that are not only based on written information on textbooks, the intense moments, and the applause for a speech which offers something new to the plate. Diplomacy is what I am considering for my future career, and International Studies at Johns Hopkins is pretty much the best major for it. So why not International Studies for my major at Johns Hopkins?

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