tgn15
Aug 30, 2008
Undergraduate / 'Each of them applied to me' - FSU admission essay [3]
I was wondering if you could help me and tell me if the content is good? I think it is okay but I'm not completely sure. Plus it is 56 words more than it is supposed to be. But keep in mind that this is my very first draft, I just wrote it for the first time today and I know it needs some revising. Here it is:
The Florida State University motto is "Vires, Artes, Mores" which literally translates into "strength," "skill," and "character." I believe that I possess all three of these things that make me a true Florida State Seminole. I have strength and I have skill and I have character. But not each concept stands on its own, its all three together that make me the person I am today, fighting for what I want more than anything, which is to become a part of the Florida State family.
...
I was wondering if you could help me and tell me if the content is good? I think it is okay but I'm not completely sure. Plus it is 56 words more than it is supposed to be. But keep in mind that this is my very first draft, I just wrote it for the first time today and I know it needs some revising. Here it is:
The Florida State University motto is "Vires, Artes, Mores" which literally translates into "strength," "skill," and "character." I believe that I possess all three of these things that make me a true Florida State Seminole. I have strength and I have skill and I have character. But not each concept stands on its own, its all three together that make me the person I am today, fighting for what I want more than anything, which is to become a part of the Florida State family.
...
