Undergraduate / "From a remote Canadian town to Columbia University" - Supp - Why Columbia? [6]

This is an AMAZING essay. However, I don't know why but I feel like you have to be a bit more specific. You write brilliantly, but if you try to substitute Columbia with say NYU or any other prestigious university, it still works. Maybe its just me. Nonetheless, you are a brilliant writer!

Undergraduate / "Melismas, Syncopations, and Cadences" - Columbia Supplement Essay [8]

Thank you very much for your suggestion! I will make the changes right away =) I am also almost done with my last paragraph so I will post that here soon.

Any other suggestions, changes, and fixes are much appreciated!!

Undergraduate / "Melismas, Syncopations, and Cadences" - Columbia Supplement Essay [8]

Thanks guys! I am adding your changes onto my essay!
Just one more sentence to go for the second paragraph.

Undergraduate / "Melismas, Syncopations, and Cadences" - Columbia Supplement Essay [8]

Okay, here is my second paragraph. Can you guys help me think of a better concluding sentence that can make a powerful impact on the admission's officer? I feel my concluding sentence is really weak. Also, the essay is about 83 characters over the limit so please feel free to shorten it! Thank You! As always, any fixes, suggestions, or changes are appreciated!! =)

Sitting in Miller Theater for the first time in my life, I was enthralled and energized to finally listen to the Columbia University orchestra. Having heard many good things about it, I knew it would be a satisfying and melodious experience. Needless to say, I was right. The fearlessness with which the maestro, Jeffery Milarsky, conducted the orchestra was exhilarating to watch. Each performer in the orchestra communicated reciprocally with the maestro, demonstrating a relaxed and focused stature as they played effortlessly with their instruments. The melismas, syncopations, cadences, and modulations were just perfect. As the crowd erupted into a thunderous round of applause at the end of the show, my thoughts echoed the booming ovation; Columbia is the ideal university for me, one that meets both my academic and artistic needs.

The most appealing aspect about Columbia, to me, is its degree of creative and educational freedom. For a person who is musically inclined, my fascination with music directly ties in with my interests in engineering, and through both a liberal arts (core) and engineering education, I can attain the best of both worlds. Growing up in a musical environment filled with the tunes of Louis Armstrong, the Beatles, and Bob Marley, I am heavily allured to "Music Humanities," a core class at Columbia, as well as the Columbia Glee Club. Though my main focus will be on engineering, I hope to musically diversify the Columbia student body by enrolling in these programs, striving to become both well-rounded and well-versed in various disciplines.

Undergraduate / "A science that relied on quantiative analysis..." - Columbia Engineering Supplement [5]

Thank You! I will correct it right away!
Any other suggestions, corrections, or fixes appreciated!!

Undergraduate / "A science that relied on quantiative analysis..." - Columbia Engineering Supplement [5]

hey guys!
Here is the entire essay:

"Chemistry is an exact science." I did not know what my teacher meant by that statement and I wasn't able to understand its implications until I applied it practically. During a titration lab, I accidently added an excess of base to an unknown acid which made it too concentrated. Although I felt it didn't make any difference, my teacher exclaimed that I had ruined the purpose of the lab. This is when I understood what was meant by an "exact science." Precision and accuracy are key components to making chemistry what it really is - a science that relies on both quantitative and qualitative analysis. It was then that I realized that I wanted to further explore concepts of chemistry without any limitations, which would only be possible through chemical engineering.

I am interested in the study of engineering because I can use my own creativity to create and develop a conceptual idea that can be used to solve problems in real life. As a person who has continually used home-made appliances to perform chemical experiments, taken apart and rebuilt computers to decipher their anatomy, and reprogrammed devices out of curiosity, engineering will further allow me to question the unknown and enhance my ability to perceive and interpret new knowledge. Though my job as a chemical engineer will be different from that of other engineers - creating pharmaceuticals and producing sustainable energy - I look forward to working with people who have similar interests, and different specialties, to accomplish a common goal.

Please help me fix it!! I don't have much time!!!!

Undergraduate / "Melismas, Syncopations, and Cadences" - Columbia Supplement Essay [8]

I changed it again and I feel like this new essay represents me even more. Please, if you guys can, take a look at it and correct and grammatical errors. I am still about 14 characters over the limit.

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

I was energized to finally listen to the Columbia University Orchestra in Miller Theater. Having heard only good things, I knew it would be a satisfying experience. Needless to say, I was right. The communication between each performer and the maestro, Jeffery Milarsky, was reciprocal, and the instrumentalists played with a sense of recreation. As the crowd erupted into a thunderous round of applause, my thoughts echoed the booming ovation; Columbia is the ideal university for me, one that meets both my academic and artistic needs.

What I find most appealing about Columbia is the balance of cerebral and secular opportunities that it will offer me. The recently built Northwest Corner Building stands out to me because it bridges all the science buildings, giving me, an imminent chemical engineer, the ability to utilize new laboratories and research facilities that I wouldn't find anywhere else. In terms of academics, Columbia's rigorous core curriculum will permit me to explore a range of subject areas to discover talents in me that I never knew I had. By taking "Art Humanities", I will be able to go to the Museum of Modern Art and analyze paintings painstakingly instead of just eye-balling them. The knowledge of worldly issues that I will garner by taking "Contemporary Civilizations", another core class, will assist me if I'm learning French in Montpelier or researching aquatic life in Antarctica.

The possibilities are infinite and through an education from Columbia, I can only succeed.