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Paulaine07   
Jan 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / People with talents: BORN OR MADE? [3]

Hi i've been practicing for my upcoming IELTS examination and i would like to ask some of your feedbacks regarding one topic i came across during my review.

It is general believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport, music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Nature versus nurture has been a very controversial and popular subject of debates nowadays. People believe that particular individuals possess a specific and unique DNA that would mold them to become "somebody" in the future.It is without a doubt that some great artists, politicians and other personalities come from families who have the same skills they possess. This is why it is believed that talents are innate to some people. On the other hand, some are against this. Many also stick to the fact that each individual are born equally. Each by whom to be shaped and raised to acquire the skills and talents they will share to the world as they grow up.

For me, each of us are born with multitude of gifts. Some just don't realize it. From the very first day of our existence we are bound to do something great. However, we need to be nurtured in order for us to reach our full potential. Like a seed,we need to be watered and taken care of in order to grow to become a fruitful plant.We may have talents, but it is essential that we, and the people around us will recognize it. Being born to parents who will shape us as well as living in a particular environment will predispose one to focus on certain activities. One should be taught to be able to enhance his own potentials.Some people whom we label as "talented" have been privileged enough to get these opportunities while growing up, that is why their skills are prominent than the others.If one is able to concentrate and give a full dedication in his strengths,chances are, it would make him one of the greatest in the future.

Of course, talent is useless without hard work. Some of the greatest scientists and athletes of all time spend sleepless nights just to reach their goals. Talent takes effort and determination. Sports athletes and musicians don't earn a lot of money by merely playing and performing. There are too much behind what we see in our television sets or what we read on newspapers. I have seen and read few autobiographies of famous people and each one had a common denominator: PERSEVERANCE. They were blessed to have developed talents starting from their childhood years so as they grew up, they put more effort into it not only because of the desire to become famous but also the desire to inspire people.

In conclusion, i strongly believe that nature and nurture goes hand in hand. Without the other, it wouldn't work. If we see our child who has potentials, it is indeed our responsibility to raise them in such a way that they would become better individuals in the future that would make us proud of.
Paulaine07   
Jan 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS : government spend money on old buildings or new buildings. agree, disagee? [3]

Nowadays, governments you can use:countries or any other synonym because it's like repeating the what was asked.attemptedshould be in present tense:are attempting to discharge the overwhelming fees to buildfor buildingnew constructions in order to achieve a better living for its residents throught out the year. Nonetheless, they have tendency to always focused on enhance many of construction instead of repairing the old facilities.ThereHere are some following reasonswhywhichisdo governments have to spend their money to renovate the old buildings.

Firstly, old buildings are seen as a neglected buildings too redundant:try structures or establishmentsin the middle of citynot appropriate,i don't actually get what you are trying to convey. It is inevitable ,what is inevitable? The building being in the middle of the city or the deterioration of the buildings? some of the old buildings condition continued to deterioratedcontinues to deterioratemoreover it become ruins which not able to seen in original formmore and more each day that sooner or later it will all eventually turn into ruins. Furthermore, living near the old buildings can become a hazardous place to live . To illustrate ,(?) some of the buildings have no longer to stand firmly in view of the fact that the building structure simply does not support it ,You mean the foundation or the structure itself isn't strong? therefore inhabitants who live in modern houses surroundingit is really riskywould be put to risk as well. Secondly, apart from its unique architecture, thethese buildings also represents inheritance offrom the past times . Due to its historicalvalue, the old age buildings have more art valuesimpact on art than modern buildings. Thirdly, the buildings have been stood in land thus government does not have to spent extra expenses to expand the area to build more constructions. I don't get this part, sorry.

In contrast,to what? in order to buildingbuild new houses ,the government should have to harnessHARNESS : occupational surroundings or routineI don't think harness is the right word since it does not support any of the idea the new lands for a new development. Although developing the road can help the inhabitants a lot , it really spendit will cost a very enormous amount of money to finishthesuch development whereas thedevelopmentrenovation ofan old buildings is more economical.

In conclusion, the government havehas to conserve the old buildings first,before venturing to a whole new modern construction project. Lastly, with the old building's existence, the younger generation have respectful to old history.This sentence should be on the paragraph preceding this.

Hi, i advise you to organize more on your thoughts and choose appropriate words for your essays. To be honest, i was pretty confused on what you are trying to convey. You lack some important parts and your stand regarding the argument is unclear. Please practice more and ask for feedbacks. You can do it if you try. :)
Paulaine07   
Jan 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / People with talents: BORN OR MADE? [3]

Thank you very much, perhaps i can use Albert Einstein as my example? What do you think? I really can't think of anyone suited perfectly. Do you have any suggestions?
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