Undergraduate / Merging onto the Highway, my sign of independence -University of Richmond [5]

"non-existant, the highway." I would change the comma to a colon

"Due to this" I would say therefore instead

"in the highway" I think you meant "on the highway" probably just a typo, but you don't want typos on your admissions essay!

"executed" means put into action, which I don't think is quite what you are trying to say.

good luck at UR! I applied early decision, apparently they have had the most competitive admissions year ever! I wish you the best, if you are applying there you are probably a very smart girl with a bright future.