Undergraduate / Extenuating Circumstances, "ready to move into my major specific classes" [6]

although i definitely changed it up a lot since I've posted this you sir have been a rather large help as I was polishing it off, thank you for helping me with my theme!! :D

Undergraduate / Extenuating Circumstances, "ready to move into my major specific classes" [6]

alright, so I'm almost done, I THINK but the conclusion and introduction still need some work, I'm just not sure what to say thats both eye catching and not too crappy sounding... also I'm not sure how to edit my thread thingy, so I'm just posting it as a reply

INTRODUCTION-At the ripe age of nineteen, I find myself in my fourth semester of college and, by the end of this semester, will have completed my entire core curriculum. I want to push my education forward so that I can work on the innovation and advancement of computer technology, the driving force behind most modern development. The Dwight Look College of Engineering at Texas A & M is the ideal school for me to in order to improve my knowledge of computers in an environment that is morally straight and provides me with opportunities to prove myself and work with advanced technology.

BODY 1-On a warm summer day my laptop decided the floor was a much more suitable place to be than my desk. Unfortunately, my hard drive did not like this and would never boot again. It was at that time that I got my first experience really working with computers internally. I unscrewed the base of my laptop and was met by a masterpiece of capacitors and resistors, microchips, memory, copper and silicon. It was at this moment that I determined to learn about each component in this work of art. After replacing my hard drive, computer hardware remained a hobby of mine. The latter half of my freshman year of college until the present was spent reading up on hybrid state memory devices and integrated circuits. Eager does not begin to define my interest in taking my electronics hobby to the next level. In the future I hope to be able to innovate the computers we use, but before one can innovate they must first become educated. Texas A & M University offers great resources, like the Industrial Affiliates Program that is a great window to get a foot in the door of an honest and reputable company.

BODY 2- Companies like Intel have been innovating the world of computers and with it all other sciences since 1969 with the invention the micro processor and since then computer technology has advanced at a faster rate than any other before it. The age of computer technology, has changed the way that people look at the world and perpetuated human ingenuity in every field of exploration. Advances in medical technology, scientific research, and business are almost all done with the use of computers. All of this comes from sand, or the silicon derived from sand. Computers are becoming the most important tool at the disposal of mankind, and keeping these tools in proper working order and continuous innovation is the key to further human development.

BODY 3-However, innovation is not something that can come without an education. Going into my college career, my family determined that it would best for me to start off in community college because of our financial situation. I am happy to have made this decision because it has given me the opportunity to explore different types of majors and gave me time to discuss my options with professionals, which ultimately led to me deciding on computer engineering. Going through these first two years has been tough, but I am proud to say that when times got tough I did not drop classes like so many others seem to do. I rode through the storm and I learned about myself because of it. Although I have gained a lot of life experience during my time at community college, having completed most of my core classes, and in the process of completing the remaining few, the time has come for me to move on to a four year university to advance my education to learn the fine craftsmanship of computer engineering. The world renowned professors in the Dwight Look College of Engineering soar well above expectations, and I could not ask for better mentors from which to learn.

BODY 4-Texas A&M you are super awesome, not just because of your fantastic reputation as one of the best engineering schools in the United Sates, or the excellent faculty, but also because of the pride you take in your moral values. Your school's firm belief in honesty, hard work, and goodwill summarizes what I want from my education as well any career that would stem from it. As it weren't enough to ask for the great moral compass that is A & M and the reputation that speaks for it nationwide, I am also looking forward to the diverse research opportunities that are offered at Texas A & M. In the field of computer engineering alone your school offers research opportunities in a plethora of different facets from quantum computing to intelligent systems. I especially cannot wait for the chance to jump on your school's research into solid state computing, and the impending day in which they render traditional memory devices obsolete.

CONLUSION- I want to improve my education so that I can work with on the cutting edge of the advancement of computer hardware. The Dwight Look College of Engineering at Texas A & M is the ideal school for me to in order to improve my knowledge of computers in an environment that is morally straight and provides me with opportunities to prove myself and advance technology.

Undergraduate / Extenuating Circumstances, "ready to move into my major specific classes" [6]

I also added the sentence "My hard drive was only a baby of no more than two when she lost her life, but if it were not for the accident I would not have wanted to major in computer engineering. " to the very beginning, I think/hope it added some pizazz to it, without going overboard