Writing Feedback / "your claim of being a bona fide student in New Zealand" - GAP YEARS EXPLAINATION [4]

Hi! I read your essay and I'm pretty impressed with it. I have highlighted my suggested revisions in red. I hope it helps and good luck!!

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I am applying for a visa permit to study in New Zealand because I want a career in the hospitality industry. At the time I graduated, there was no training school for the hospitality industry in Vietnam. Even now, except for a few study programs offered by private institutions, there is very little development of theHospitalityhospitality industry as a separate and specialized academic and practical field of study. I am aware that study abroad in a specialized field is a difficult task to achieve and excel at; therefore I took time to prepare the necessary skills. I found a job to be financially independent. I signed a 5 years contract so I can'tcould not have any formal full-time study. But, I have no regrets.because whileWhile I was working at Nghe An's Blind Association, I accumulated a lot ofhad many good experiences. In particular, I acquired a skill which I certainly cannot learn from school:is how to lead the blind correctly. Actually, before anything else, I learned to dress in professional attireprofessionally and to be patient and also friendly to everyone regardless of their appearance, status, or attitudes because I'm likelyI am the first person people interact with any time they call or visit . As a receptionist, I did routine tasks such as greet visitors,and handle common situations such as answering the phone, make returning phone calls, receive and transmitreceiving and tranferring messages, getand writing down appointments....ConsequentlyBecause of these tasks , my communication skills improved very quickly . I also had a decentdeveloped proficient knowledge of the various applications in Microsoft Office in order to type correspondence,and keep and update appointment logs....Besides, asAs the only one in the staff can usestaff member proficient in English, I had a chance participate in activities of many projects funded by foreign associations, especially, the Community-based Rehabilitation Project with the financial support from SRF (Swedish Association of the Visually-Impaired). As a result, I learned to communicate well in written language as well as foreign languages.

I thinkbelieve those skills will help me a lot but I will need all education experiences that accelerateexpand and enhance my hospitality management knowledge, skills and attitudes , and fully prepare me for an exciting and successful career in hospitality management. And inIn today's ever-changing economy, the job market is more competitive than ever. It is not as easy to move into management as it once was, and it will most likely take more than a little hard work to land the position. Due to this, I wish to earn a diploma in Hotel Management. I intend to follow this up with a bachelor's degree. I have discussed my choice of School with my family and have applied to Pacific International Hotel Management School (PIHMS) because of its professional hospitality environment, the industry placement programme, the number of successful PIHMS graduates, and , especially, the suitable fee. After finishing the course, I will go back to Viet NamVietnam to be near my family. I believe this course will offer me opportunities and practical experience to work in the area that I'm keen on. I wish for being success in my country.

Research Papers / Do social expectations affect people and their behavior? - thesis statement [3]

To me, the topic wants you to discuss the how people and their behavior are influenced by what is expected in a social situation. Maybe you can say something to the extent of this: Behavior can be influenced by social situations and the expectations of the individuals involved. I hope this helps.