Graduate / the idea of playing individual sports and team one (master degree admission) [10]

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Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Graduate / the idea of playing individual sports and team one (master degree admission) [10]

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Some people prefer to play team sports, while others prefer to play individual sports. Discuss the advantages of each. Then indicate which you prefer and why.

Nowdays, people raise to execerise every morning or when they have free time. Some people prefer to play team sports, while others prefer to play individual sports. In my view, each of concepts would be advantages.

Accordingly, the idea of team sports is build strong relationship amongs members of the team. For instance, if people play volleyball, they have to manage thier team well by using energy and power in order to strenghten the match. As they get win, their team have a good time and close relationship toward each other. Moreover, in a team they can be the leader who is chosen by all members has a great personal charisma.

Consequently, playing individual sports has also advantages. People can play alone don't reconcile anyone to play with them. The individual sports are swimming, bowing, golf, track and filed, and so on.

In conclusion, the idea of playing individual sports and team one has many advantages. For me I prefer to play team sports; badminton women's double. Because I like my partner share feelings and brainstorming to win the match. Moreover, I really enjoy and fun when I play with her.

Graduate / the idea of playing individual sports and team one (master degree admission) [10]

People attend school for many different reasons (for example, expanded knowledge, society awareness, and enhanced interpersonal relationship). Why do you think people decide to go to school? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (please give me advice)

All children have access to free, compulsory education from the age of six to twelve years of age. Later, they decide to enroll to the university. People attend school for many different reasons. For example, they want to expanding knowledged, raising society awareness, and enhancing interpersonal relationship. In my view, people decide to go to school because of good job opportunities in the future, discovery of a new experiences, and learning human behaviours.

First of all, people decide to go to school is that they hope to get a good opportunities in a job. Nowdays, it is diffcult to find a good job unless people attend to the class regularly until get a degree. People believe that they have to pay extra attention to the study as much as they can they will grasp a good chance.

Secondly, discovery of new experiences is a reason why people decide to go to school. In a chemical class people try to conduct an experiment. A new activities, idea or method that they find out what happens or what effect it has. They had never seen it before.

Thirdly, people decide to go to school is that they can learn human behaviours. They study of the way different human live. If they know many kinds of human behavior they will understantd each other and work better. Moreover, they also have a lot of friedliness.

In conclusion there are many reasons why people decide to go to school. Education is very important for people around the world. A process of teaching and training are available to improve knowledge and develop skills. Accordingly, people must attend to school.

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