Undergraduate / Business field / Better Place / Improve Education - Application short response answer [5]

Hello,
I am a high school student applying to summer program I look forward to attending. The application asks me to answer a series of short response questions, which I'm not the best at. I know it's a bit cheesy. Please edit and give suggestions!

Thank you.

1) Where do you see yourself in 5-10 years? Briefly describe your career goals. Include a short discussion of your career planning.
During the my college years, I wish to gain experience in the business field working with PeaceCorps and studying abroad. Shortly after successfully graduating from undergraduate school with a degree in ....

3) If you were given the authority to improve the educational system, what specific changes would you make and why would you make them?
Day after day, I have sat in the cafeteria of my high school watching students devour unhealthy food (usually hamburgers and french-fries) served to them by school aides. Childhood obesity is growing epidemic in America. It may lead to heart disease and other life threatening sicknesses. I believe the first step in solving this issue is not by offering more physical education courses but by serving organic, healthy food in the cafeteria. This first step may save a generation of suffering lives.

Undergraduate / What can you offer and accept through this program? - Asian students difficulties. [3]

Hello,
I'm applying to a program I desparately want to join. However, with a very busy schedule, I am forced to rush through my personal statements. Please try to edit and better my essays.

Thank you,

Stephanie

Question 1: Why would you like to join ASAP? What qualities and experience can you bring as a member of ASAP? What are you hoping to learn?

The lessons in the world are endless, so I try to make every year count by experiencing new things through extracurricular activities. I was never one of those students who went by each year in high school without being a volunteer or member of an out of school program. This should imply how ecstatic I was when I learned about the Asian American Student Advocacy Project (ASAP) and the unique experience it has to offer; as I have to offer it.

I have strong confidence in myself that I will be an asset to ASAP. I hold a considerate, helpful personality that is needed everywhere. However, besides my personality and experience, I also hold one of the crucial qualifications necessary to be an ASAP member. I am an Asian born American living in a single parent home and knows the difficulties Asian Americans experience with limited resources available to them. I have a great imagination that I look forward to sharing to help ASAP reach its goals.

During ASAP, I will learn and mature into the confident young individual I know I can be. I wish to learn more about the Asian community so I can help improve it. Also, I hope to step out of my comfort zone and become more comfortable in public speaking. I am sure ASAP will be able to offer this to their members.

ASAP is a wonderful, one of a kind program that gives and accepts so much. I desperately look forward to becoming part of the ASAP community, and thus helping the community I will always be part of; the Asian American community.

Question 2: Give an example of a problem you think makes it difficult for Asain Pacific American students to succeed in school and prepare for/go to college. How would you raise awareness of this issue to your school, peers, and community?

"You're Asian, you must be smart! If not, you're a disgrace to all Asians." This is what many Asian American students are forced to encounter throughout their school years. There is not one Asian American that has not felt the effect of stereotyping at their school. Stereotypical remarks are becoming how others see Asian Americans. They are drowning in the identity "outsiders" created for them from the over dramatized movies that has plagued the community. This incognito has limited the resources available to them.

In Kenneth Woo's essay, Konglish, he discusses his difficulty growing up in America as a Korean American. He liked to consider himself as a science and math nerd, since he was scared to face the true reality that he was even greater at writing. From reading his essay, readers learn that a reason why he hid his talent was because he was afraid of the judgments he'll receive from other individuals knowing he was an Asian who was good at writing. Asian Americans in our community are being held back because of stereotypes, which are controlling them and their futures.

Individuals must learn to fight stereotypes and bring back the pride of being an Asian American in the community. There should be mentor support groups where students from all types of cultures could mingle together and learn more about each other to break the barrier between them. Because, many of the tight knit groups seen in schools are made up with only one culture; whether it be just African Americans together or just Koreans together. Secondly, the Asian Americans in today's society know too little about their origins. Programs should be available to them to gain pride and knowledge about who they are.

Asian Americans must gain the confidence in their cultures to break the stereotypes that holds them back.

Research Papers / Classical Mythology - Which of these Thesis Statements is the best? [3]

Hello,
The topic of my Research/Thesis paper is Classical Mythology (more specifically Ovid's Metamorphosis) in Shakespeare plays.

I am open to grammatical touch-ups, etc.

Thanks in advance.

1) Because William Shakespeare alluded many of his plays to classical mythology, there is an extensive amount of evidence that Shakespeare was familiar with mythological works, specifically Ovid's Metamorphoses.

2) Because William Shakespeare alluded many of his works of literature to classical mythology, there is direct evidence that Shakespeare was familiar with Ovid's Metamorphoses.

3) There is a direct correlation between William Shakespeare's plays and Ovid's Metamorphoses.

4) Although many readers would agree that William Shakespeare wrote the most profound literature of his time, many would be in dispute over the fact that Shakespeare derived many of his ideas from Ovid.

5) Shakespeare's allusion to classical mythology in many of his works offers considerable evidence that he was familiar with Ovid's Metamorphoses.