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Posts by liljay9083
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Oct 9, 2008
Undergraduate / "I've been a musician for eight years.." - FSU admission essay [6]

Of these words, Artes and Mores seem to be the most prevalent in my life.

The word that appealed to me the most was Artes. I've been a musician for eight years and I fully understand how dedication to a skill pays off in the end. Music is definitely an aspect that takes perseverance to succeed in. As we all know, when someone is first leaning an instrument, they definitely don't start at the professional level. When I first started playing piano ...
liljay9083   
Oct 11, 2008
Undergraduate / "I've been a musician for eight years.." - FSU admission essay [6]

i decided to just delete the last part. "along with the help of my role models: my band director, my step-dad, and my mom." because that would lead to a entire new long paragraph. i'm expanding on the main topic of the last paragraph leading into a conclusion. i also fixed all of the contractions. thank you for all of your help :)
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