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Last Post: May 17, 2011
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junephysics   
May 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:Art museums or recreational facilities? [7]

The difference between building an art museum and digging a swimming pool is more than creating different concrete bodies, it is about what kind of culture we want to have, about what kind of life we want to pursue. In this point, I hold the belief that the government should raise funds to establish an art museum or a music performance center rather than recreational facilities.

To start with, art including music makes great contribution to the contents of our culture and history. Painters and musicians create beautiful art pieces which is a lively portrait of the then life style, circumstances, with a demonstration of spirit states in a society. To preserve these art works, and make them accessible to all people is the fundamental obligation of an art museum. By these means, culture has passed on from generation to generation, and we can know who we are, where we came from and how our ancestors used to live.

Furthermore, art museums educate the public in both moral and aesthetic realm. In the world of visual images, however, the museum is the primary source for education, merely by existing, by preserving and exhibiting works of art. What the artists depicted in the drawings will pass on directly to the people gazing at it, his emotion, value and his philosophy. Audience will also have a rough sense about paintings, painters and the history of art through exhibitions, and gradually get to know what a masterpiece is like to be, and how to appreciate it fully. An art museum is educational, in the broadest and best sense.

Important as educational process is, the museum is less a place to learn about art than a place in which to enjoy it. An art museum exists for our pleasure, for recreation and the kind of quiet contemplation that suit each of us best. Every time we feel lonely and upset, a glimpse at these quiet, gorgeous paintings, or a moment for Bach and Chopin, will drive away depression and instruct us to appreciate beautiful things again.

In conclusion, art museums and music performance centers serve for entertainment, moral up lift and popular taste improvements, and an absence of these buildings is a great lose to public spiritual life. That is why I strongly recommend that it is crucial important for the government to support such cultural places.

I'm afaid what I've talked is not convincing enough...please give me some advice!
junephysics   
May 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:Art museums or recreational facilities? [7]

Surprised to have so much advice! Thank you all!

Frank, I'll remenber to add the question in front next time~

Kevin, you're always hepful, and thank you for picking out all the faulty sentences

ddpddpzzz,you made a very good suggestion on this essay thank you!
junephysics   
May 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL> moving to different countries is not good because of losing old friends [10]

the structure of your sentences is very good

just pay attention to the use of intransitive verb

moving other places is not better in the end=>turns to fail in the end

staying a familiar place => staying at

being adapted fast-changing society=>adapted to

migrating other places=>migrating to other places

whether I could go my destinations without getting lost =>reach my destination

86.2% cities =>86.2% of cities
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