Undergraduate / I am passionate about each activity which I am apart of - Elaborate on one of your activities... [2]

I drafted up this short answer essay. I'm wondering whether it is decent or not.

I am not involved in every club. But I am passionate about each activity which I am apart of. In my school's drama program, the Opening Night Act, I have had the opportunity of playing roles on stage as well as off. Last spring, during our production of Bye Bye, Birdie, I challenged myself with my first on stage role-Mr. Johnson. Upon acquiring the part, I discovered that this character would not only act, but also sing and dance. As the rehearsals progressed, I found myself quite tense and nervous about being in front of an audience. The ONA assisted anyone who struggles. Teamwork was very abundant. Eventually, I found myself even helping others. This is not like all other activities out there. The ONA is different. We are like a family.

Input would be great!

Undergraduate / My strengths, talents, and interest - why do I wish to attend UHart? [2]

I am applying to UHart. Their essay question reads:
Considering your strengths, talents, and interest why do you wish to attend UHart?

I came up with this rough draft. I'm not sure if it fully answers the question. Any help would be great!

I have come a long way since the beginning of my high school career. I started out as a shy kid, who basically just focused on his studies. Over the course of three or so years, I discovered some faith and courage in myself to finally break out of my shell. This allowed me to discover what I wanted out of life. I found my goals, my dreams. I began to set out and reach these goals. My determination to make a good future for myself grows more every day.

I am not exactly sure what I am most talented at but I do know what I take most pride in; that is writing. In my opinion, going to the University of Hartford would allow me to excel greatly in my knowledge and understanding of English and writing.

I would like to major in English at the University of Hartford and minor in video. I believe the University of Hartford will help me not only to find myself further but also the happiness I strive for in success. I am hoping to be to garner higher knowledge in writing through the University of Hartford's English program and be able to combine those ideas with what I learn in the film courses-to essentially find a career in writing for film and/or television. I am not very strong in math or science; therefore, majoring in English and video, I would be able to learn in an area that I have a great passion for.

I am done dreaming. I am ready to make my dreams happen. I believe the University of Hartford will allow me to do so.