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Nurika   
Aug 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL physical exercise -on giving preference [4]

TASK: Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Although some people think that the major part of school schedule should be entirely devoted to academics, I truly believe that the physical education part should not be outweighed. Physical exercises help to create healthy nation, assist to learning through direct observation and finally aid to financial development of a country.

First of all, the ancient Latin proverb says: "Anima sana in corpore sano", which means that healthy body is basis for healthy soul. There is a direct linkage between people's health and the frequency of doing physical exercises. The more we practice, the better we feel. Additionally, there is a fact that one can improve health conditions with everyday physical activity: gradually, step by step we change physical condition to better. So, if the entire nation, from their school ages begin going for sports and try doing that everyday, eventually it may help to build healthy nation.

Besides, when we practice outdoors and indoors sports, many aspects are getting clearer. For example, when a person goes jogging everyday, eventually he can understand his own body through direct observation. Alike, the school basketball team gains more knowledge on how to succeed in some particular kind of throwing the ball into hoot practicing rather than learning theoretically. Furthermore, almost all natural science discoveries were made by direct observation, which is a part of physical education.

Last, but not least, financial sustainability of a region mostly depends on how healthy the population is. For instance, the money invested into physical education program can save allocations into healthcare, since the nation is comparatively healthy. Along with that, physically healthy people can contribute more both into economical and social development. As a matter of fact, the better a person feels, the better his brain works. Therefore, putting physical activities in early steps of human development would finally lead to mentally healthy society. As hence it ends up with financially competitive country.

In the conclusion, I would like to say that the more attention is withdrawn to a problem of physical education, the more influence we can get on academic success of students.
Nurika   
Aug 22, 2011
Essays / Why was Italy chosen for the renaissance? - How to start an Essay? [3]

Dear aadhargupta_2,
Well, in my opinion, I think you have done a great job of research- like getting all these predispositions fro Renaisance in Italy written in order.

What i would recommend you to develop your essay is to focus on one topic, let's take no.4, for instance, and start narrowing it down. For example, to take every artist and focus on his contribution to Renaissance, and finally, you will be able to trace some similarities, that probably affected the existence of Renaissance in Italy. For example, you chose Michelangelo, the most renowned work, the style he used to create it, the ideas he occupied for creating this pieces of art, etc. then you take Rafael, and etc.

For starting I guess, you should begin with some quote to grasp attention of a person reading your essay. you can also use anecdote, like a short story, for example, what made you think about this research or essay, such as "What is really special about the topic", "how did it change the development of humanity" or something like that.

BTW, how long should your paper be?
hope this helps, and hope i got it right,
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