bleh1494
Nov 11, 2011
Undergraduate / "Uniquely, Geeky" : Stanford Common App Essay [3]
"When I get college catalogues, they are representing smiling, plastic-esque Barbie and Ken teens that seemed to jump right out of a Macy's or Abercrombie & Fitch catalogue who were born playing football when pageants and tanning."
I found that sentence a bit confusing, try editing it.
Good luck!
"When I get college catalogues, they are representing smiling, plastic-esque Barbie and Ken teens that seemed to jump right out of a Macy's or Abercrombie & Fitch catalogue who were born playing football when pageants and tanning."
I found that sentence a bit confusing, try editing it.
Good luck!