Writing Feedback / a severe weather experience first paragraph [2]

Write a description of a severe weather event you have experienced after you write the details in first person.

"Wake up,wake up" my mom scramed loudly "Im tired" I mumbled. My mom told me "You are not going to school because the snow is coming down really fast andf your school is closed. I jumped out of bed really excited. Warm water came driping down my body. I reached for the two in one Head and Sholder's shampoo and conditionar, suddenly i slipt down and felt the impact in my back. With my palms i washed tha water drops that had went into me eyes. I saw the snow coming down really fast and rotating in the sky through the window that was located in the side. It semmed like if little cotton balls were raining. It was a true beuty. I camed out of the bathtub and i dried my selve quikly and went to my droor to take out bangay to apply it in my back.