Undergraduate / 'We were the only South Asian Muslim family' - statement for University of California [6]

Tell a story of why you want to become a pharmacits
organize what you are going to talk about in each paragraph
make sure you always talk about you
make your sentences clearer and add punctutations where needed and you are good to go!

Undergraduate / 'The language barrier is the biggest challenge of my life' - UT Essay [4]

I love this essay! Good luck on getting in this school!
You should probably reword the last paragraph though, I understand the point you were aiming to but I dont think that a university would like to read that you dont take your education seripusly ( not that you did say that) but just reword it to be on the safe side

Hope this helped

Undergraduate / 'We were the only South Asian Muslim family' - statement for University of California [6]

why do you want to be a pharmacist? you dont need to rewrite it maybe just add lke two paragraphs and move the ones you have around

Either way the essay is pretty good

Undergraduate / 'The language barrier is the biggest challenge of my life' - UT Essay [4]

You welcome, and if you are in the tope 10% you would not have any trouble getting in. Just make sure you sent all the schools everything. I sent my things a month ahead so when I applied I received an acceptance the next day through mail.

Undergraduate / 'the Dream Act represents hope' - Apply Texas Topic B- Issue of Importance [7]

There is actually a different kind of FAFSA that you could use I think its called Affidavits