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Dec 10, 2011
Undergraduate / 'making friends in the US' - Commonapp - activities or work experience [4]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

For a new immigrant to the United States, making friends is the most important key to happiness. Friends help to keep balance between the necessity of working hard in school and downtime. It was difficult for me until I participated in Challenge Day.

Challenge Day was an event that I was fortunately invited to attend. Staff facilitators and students working in small groups shared lives they have had to deal with. The "challenge" was to understand one another better and make the school a better place for everyone. Challenge Day had a profound effect on me. I learned many valuable things. For example, it is not okay to judge others, it is up to me to keep my head up even when things are difficult, and there is value in opening up to others and sharing my feelings.

As a result of my participation in Challenge Day I have been able to make many good friends. It helped me to better understand the people around me . Now I can face all my problems in being a newcomer with more confidence.
caohoang10   
Dec 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I have some engineering background' - Carnegie Mellon University Supplemental [4]

"Although I currently have no experience with mechanical engineering specifically, I do have some engineering background."

I don't think you should talk about this in your essay. They are "smart ENOUGH" to know whether you have any experience from your essay :)

"If I do attend Carnegie Mellon University, I can become the engineer that I want to become."

=> A little awkward, isn't it?

That is my own opinions.

Your essay is looking good though ;)
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