Scholarship / 'I plan to major in biology' - Scholarship Louisville [7]

Thank you SOOOOOO much!!!!! I am not finished with the essay, I still have to answer the other half of the question. If i write it could you review it also? I have to finish this tonight. but THANK YOU SO MUCH. VITURAL HUGGGGGGG lol i promise im not a creeper, just a sorta stressed senior in high school LOL :) thank you again

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I also agree that I could not find any errors! Goodluck in your studies :)

Essays / Health Care Availability (need to write a working thesis and outline) [5]

The tip that my AP teacher told me was to always have details and answer the question in the thesis. then explain and back up your reasoning in the rest of the "body" paragraphs :) This could help you with structure of the essay

Scholarship / 'I plan to major in biology' - Scholarship Louisville [7]

My scholarship Essay needs review. Please could someone read, and review my essay? :)

How will your upcoming educational experience contribute to your future commitment of uplifting your campus community and/or the community at large?

I am eager to apply my energy and passion for learning to the University of Louisville. I plan to major in biology, and I believe that the biology department will help me achieve my educational goals. I enjoy science because it allows for critical analysis of theories and vast experimentation which leads to new solutions. In the future, I am interested in the opportunity to apply my biology degree to help the community. I plan to use my education in biology to positively impact my own community. Helping people is my passion, and a background in biology is essential. I aspire to become an Obstetrician/Gynecologist (OB/GYN). An OB/GYN is a physician who specializes in obstetrics and gynecology. Obstetrics is a branch of medical science that deals with the delivery in childbirth. Gynecology is a branch of medical science that deals with diseases and routine physical care of the reproductive system of women. Although the process of achieving a medical career is very challenging, I am confident that with dedication to my studies and with the guidance from the University of Louisville, I will be able to achieve this goal. I am dedicated to work hard, focus and learn from my future U of L professors. To further my insight in entering the health career field, I have been a blood drive committee member for two years. This allows me to volunteer at my high school for the Hoxworth blood drives. The blood drive committee has given me the chance to shadow a Phlebotomist. A Phlebotomist is a nurse or health trained worker in drawing venous blood for testing and/or donation. I was able to learn with a medical team. I also participated in the Health Research Youth Academy,during the summer of 2011. I shadowed physicians, researched cancers, and had physiology lectures. In the future I will make a commitment to continue my blood committee volunteer work and my summer research studies. Not only will this uplift the campus of U of L it will benefit the community at large because... ( IM NOT FINISH) ( How can I end this essay and answer the 2nd question at the same time?)

Scholarship / 'I plan to major in biology' - Scholarship Louisville [7]

Thank you guys for helping me with this essay. I was able to get 4,000 as my scholarship! thank you again!